视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Work on grammar, reduce redundancy, and make a clear topic sentence with one or two specific supporting details. Use correct verb forms (e.g., 'taking' → 'take', 'gives me a freshening mind' → 'refreshes my mind'). Keep the answer within 2–4 sentences and use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., 'because' or 'so').

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it refreshes my mind and relaxes me. For example, when I photograph a mountain or a river, I feel calmer and more positive, so I often look at those pictures later to lift my mood.

建议: Be concise and give a clear preference or balanced answer, then support it with one specific reason. Avoid repeating words and correct small errors ('on on', 'which attracts me a lot'). Use a linking phrase like 'because' or 'however' to connect clauses.

示例: I like both urban and rural views, but I usually prefer rural scenery because I enjoy the peace and natural light there. However, I sometimes choose urban views when the city architecture or skyline looks particularly interesting.

建议: Avoid fillers ('uh', 'which is I think'), and produce a clear, direct response stating preference with a reason and a brief example. Fix word choice ('upflit' → 'uplift') and keep sentences short and grammatical. Use one linking word (e.g., 'so' or 'therefore') to explain purpose.

示例: I enjoy views both at home and abroad, but I often photograph any scenery that appeals to me because I want to remember the moment. For instance, if I see a beautiful coastline while traveling, I take a photo on my phone and later look at it to uplift my mood.

× 'Oh yes, I love to taking a pictures of different views because it gives me a freshening mind.'

✓ 'Oh yes, I love taking pictures of different views because they refresh my mind.'

'to taking' is incorrect because after 'love' we use the gerund 'taking' without 'to'; 'a pictures' mixes singular article with plural noun so use 'pictures' without 'a'; 'freshening mind' is unidiomatic — use 'refresh my mind' or 'a refreshed mind'; subject-pronoun agreement: 'pictures' plural takes 'they' and verb 'refresh'. Suggestion: use verb+ -ing after 'love', match article with noun number, and choose natural collocation 'refresh my mind'.

× 'Whenever I take any picture of any natural picture of then it refresh my mood and I feel very happy.'

✓ 'Whenever I take a picture of a natural scene, it refreshes my mood and I feel very happy.'

'any picture of any natural picture of' is repetitive and awkward; use 'a picture of a natural scene'. Present simple 'take' refers to habitual action, so result clause must be present simple 'refreshes' (third person singular) — this also involves subject-verb agreement (ID 27) but follows the present habitual; 'then' is unnecessary. Suggestion: simplify noun phrases, use present simple 'refreshes' for singular subject, and write clear sequence: 'Whenever I take a picture of a natural scene, it refreshes my mood.'

× 'Whenever I take any picture of any natural picture of then it refresh my mood and I feel very happy.'

✓ 'Whenever I take a picture of a natural scene, it refreshes my mood and I feel very happy.'

The subject 'it' (referring to 'a picture') is third person singular and requires 'refreshes' not 'refresh'. This is a subject-verb agreement error. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with their subjects in number and person.

× 'While I prefer both, it depends on on scenery and which attracts me a lot and no matter if I am in a rural area or urban area, it depends on the nature or the time.'

✓ 'I prefer both; it depends on the scenery and what attracts me, and whether I am in a rural or an urban area — it also depends on the weather and the time of day.'

'depends on on' duplicates the preposition; use 'depends on the scenery'. 'which attracts me a lot' should be 'what attracts me' to refer to a thing; 'no matter if I am in a rural area or urban area' is wordy — use 'whether I am in a rural or an urban area'. 'depends on the nature or the time' is unclear; likely 'weather' or 'time of day'. Suggestion: remove duplicate prepositions, use 'depends on' + noun, use 'whether' for alternatives, and choose precise nouns like 'weather' or 'time of day'.

× 'I prefer both and I whenever I see a, uh, good scenery, which attracts me a lot, then I immediately capture that moment in my, uh, phone and after that I watch it to upflit my mood and which is I think.'

✓ 'I prefer both, and whenever I see a good scene that attracts me, I immediately capture the moment on my phone, and later I watch it to uplift my mood.'

'a good scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is an uncountable noun; use 'a good scene' or 'a beautiful view'. 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone' (preposition); 'watch it to upflit my mood' contains 'upflit' (incorrect word) — use 'uplift'. The final fragment 'and which is I think' is ungrammatical and should be removed or rephrased. Suggestion: use correct articles with countable/uncountable nouns, use 'on' for devices, and choose correct verbs ('uplift').