视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and unclear phrases like “I'm in place or do you know something.”

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing interesting views when I travel because I like capturing places I haven’t seen before. For example, last month I took photos of an old market with colorful stalls and narrow alleys that looked great on social media.

建议: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement) and reduce repetition. Use one linking word to connect reason and example, and replace vague phrases like “dark city” with clearer descriptions.

示例: I prefer urban views because cities offer striking architecture and vibrant night scenes. For instance, at night the illuminated skyscrapers and streetlights create dramatic reflections that are perfect for night photography.

建议: Fix subject-verb agreement and remove hesitations. Provide a clear comparative sentence then a specific reason or example. Avoid repeating phrases and make the answer fluent and natural.

示例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because I enjoy discovering unfamiliar architecture and landmarks. For example, when I visited Lisbon I photographed unique tiled buildings and narrow streets that felt very different from my hometown.

× Whenever I'm visiting a new city, I'm in place or do you know something, umm, that I never, umm, saw again before.

✓ Whenever I visit a new city, I'm in a place I have never seen before.

Use simple present 'I visit' for habitual or general actions rather than present continuous 'I'm visiting'. The phrase 'I'm in place' is ungrammatical; use 'in a place' and use present perfect 'have never seen' to show prior lack of experience up to now.

× I love taking pictures off of different views.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views.

The preposition 'off of' is nonstandard and unnecessary here. Use 'of' to indicate what the pictures are of.

× I love uploading pictures to the social media.

✓ I love uploading pictures to social media.

'The social media' is incorrect; 'social media' is a general uncountable noun and does not need the definite article. Drop 'the'.

× To be honest, city or urban areas has more beautiful architecture and buildings, so I prefer taking pictures here, especially at night when the lights are on and the city is quiet.

✓ To be honest, cities or urban areas have more beautiful architecture and buildings, so I prefer taking pictures here, especially at night when the lights are on and the city is quiet.

Subject 'cities or urban areas' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' not 'has'. Also use plural 'cities' rather than singular 'city' to match 'urban areas'.

× And I absolutely love dark city with all those, uh, thousands of lights above the sky.

✓ And I absolutely love a dark city with all those thousands of lights in the sky.

Use the indefinite article 'a dark city' to refer to one example; 'above the sky' is unnatural—use 'in the sky'. Also remove the comma before 'thousands'.

× Foreign countries excites me more because the the buildings that I have never seen before.

✓ Foreign countries excite me more because the buildings are things I have never seen before.

Subject 'Foreign countries' is plural so use 'excite' not 'excites' (subject-verb agreement). The original clause is fragmented; add 'are things' or restructure to make a complete reason clause and use present perfect 'have never seen' to indicate prior lack of experience.

× Also I love uploading the new places, umm new countries, uh, landmark photos on social media.

✓ Also I love uploading photos of new places, new countries, and landmarks on social media.

Do not use 'the' before general plural nouns like 'new places' or 'new countries'. Use 'photos of' to clarify the object and list items with conjunctions for clarity.

× So I feel like uh, more than my own city. I prefer taking photos.

✓ So I feel like I prefer taking photos in other countries more than in my own city.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. Combine them into one complete comparative sentence, placing the comparison target after 'more than' and using 'in other countries' to clarify location.