视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 总体表达能够传达意思，但存在较多语法和用词错误、重复和口语填充词（如“umm”）。回答过长且有不完整句子（如“Add strength to indulge my passion for it.”）。建议：1) 使用更自然的句子开头直接回应问题，例如“I enjoy taking photos of different views.” 2) 避免重复与不完整句子，合并相近观点并控制在最多五句内。3) 减少填充词，使用连接词（such as ‘because’, ‘so’, ‘therefore’）使逻辑更清晰。4) 改正用词错误（如“special funds”应为“special fondness/interest”，“get a respite”可以改为“get some respite”）。具体练习：写出一到两句主题句，然后补充一到两条具体细节并使用合适的连接词。

示例: I enjoy taking photos of different views because photography is my hobby. For example, I often spend hours photographing mountains, lakes and wildlife to relax after a stressful week, so it helps me recharge.

建议: 回答直接，但有多处语法和词汇错误（如“offer them peaceful”，“Clearwater”，“broaden of daily routine”）。有重复概念（和平与放松）未给出具体例子或对比细节。建议：1) 用简洁明确的主题句，如“I prefer rural views to urban ones.” 2) 使用准确词汇（“clear water”而非“Clearwater”）和固定搭配（“escape from the daily routine”）。3) 用一两个具体细节或对比来支持观点，例如描述乡村的颜色、声音或活动。4) 注意主谓一致和时态，保持句子不超过五句。

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside feels calmer and cleaner. For example, I enjoy seeing blue skies and clear water in small villages, and the quiet atmosphere helps me escape the noise and rush of city life.

建议: 回答清晰但表达有些口语化和小错误（如“famous views”可用“famous sights/landmarks”，“high lake”不自然，“explore more place”应为“explore more places”）。内容可更具体，给出原因或一两个具体例子说明为什么更喜欢本国风景。建议：1) 开门见山回答，如“I prefer sightseeing in my own country.” 2) 使用准确名词和复数形式，列举具体景点时可简短说明原因。3) 用连接词衔接句子并控制句数。4) 可加一条个人经历或计划来丰富回答。

示例: I prefer sightseeing in my own country because I can appreciate famous landmarks like the Great Wall and other scenic lakes. For example, I often visit nearby lakes with friends at weekends to relax and escape the city’s hustle and bustle.

× Yes, I'm passionate about photography and I feel like that I have special funds for it.

✓ Yes, I'm passionate about photography and I feel that I have a special fondness for it.

原句用詞不當：“feel like that” 和 “special funds” 是錯誤搭配。應使用 “feel that” 表達陳述，或 “feel like” 單獨使用表示想做某事；“fondness”（喜好）比 “funds”（資金）符合語境。建議使用固定搭配並注意詞彙選擇。

× Therefore, I tend to take photos for different views like mountains, lakes, and wildlife for hours.

✓ Therefore, I tend to take photos of different scenes such as mountains, lakes, and wildlife for hours.

原句中介詞和名詞搭配不當：“take photos for” 應為 “take photos of”；“views” 在此處可改為 “scenes” 更自然。保留現在分詞結構時要注意正確介詞搭配。

× Add strength to indulge my passion for it.

✓ This strengthens my ability to indulge my passion for it.

原句片語 “Add strength to indulge my passion for it” 結構不完整，缺主語和正確動詞形式。改為完整句子並調整語序，使語意清晰。

× I think it can help me to umm get a respite from my stressful work.

✓ I think it can help me get a respite from my stressful work.

在英語中，help 後面常用不帶 to 的動詞原形或帶 to 的不定式；此處去掉多餘的 “to” 更自然。另外刪去語氣詞 “umm”。

× Well, I prefer views in rural areas.

✓ Well, I prefer the views in rural areas.

當談及特定範疇的風景時，使用定冠詞 “the” 更恰當，表示特指那類風景。

× I think they can offer them peaceful and beautiful atmosphere compared with urban areas.

✓ I think they can offer a peaceful and beautiful atmosphere compared with urban areas.

原句多餘代詞 “them” 並且缺不定冠詞 “a”。“offer a peaceful and beautiful atmosphere” 為正確搭配。

× The blue sky, the Clearwater and the peaceful atmosphere of life can help me to escape from the broaden of daily routine and also gives me a respite from my stressful work.

✓ The blue sky, the clear water, and the peaceful atmosphere of life can help me escape from the boredom of the daily routine and also give me a respite from my stressful work.

多處錯誤：1) “Clearwater” 應拆為 “clear water”；2) “broaden” 用錯，正確為名詞 “boredom”；3) 主語為複數（the blue sky, the clear water, and the peaceful atmosphere），動詞應用原形 “help me escape” 或 “help me to escape” 並與第二部分並列用複數動詞 “give” 而不是 “gives”。建議注意名詞/動詞詞性和主謂一致。

× I prefer views in my own country.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country.

同前，談及一類特定的景觀時，可加定冠詞 “the” 使表達更自然。

× You know, there are many famous views like the Freedom City, the Great Wall and the high lake in my own country.

✓ You know, there are many famous sights like Freedom City, the Great Wall, and the high lake in my country.

1) “views” 可改為 “sights” 更符合常用表達；2) 地名前通常不加定冠詞 “the”（除非為慣用名）；3) “high lake” 若為專有名詞則應首字母大寫或用更自然表達 “a high lake”；4) “my own country” 可簡化為 “my country”。注意名詞選擇與冠詞使用。

× And I'm going to explore more place with my friends during weekends or holidays.

✓ And I'm going to explore more places with my friends during weekends or holidays.

“place” 應為複數 “places” 與 “more” 搭配；此外 “during weekends or holidays” 可保留。注意名詞單複數。

× It can give me a break from the hustle and bustle from the city life and also relax myself.

✓ It can give me a break from the hustle and bustle of city life and also help me relax.

重複使用 “from” 不必要，正確搭配是 “the hustle and bustle of city life”；“relax myself” 在英語中不常用，通常說 “help me relax” 或 “relax me”。因此改為更地道表達。