视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural, accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms), avoid redundancy, and add a specific detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I often take photos whenever I visit a new place; for example, last week I visited a waterfront and captured many pictures of the sunset and reflections on the water.

建议: Remove hesitations and ensure correct tense and agreement. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a reason and a specific example using linking words. Keep it under five sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., skyscrapers, skyline, panoramic).

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and city skylines. For instance, I often go to my rooftop to photograph the skyscrapers at sunset, which creates a dramatic panoramic view.

建议: Clarify meaning and fix vocabulary/grammar mistakes (e.g., 'contest' → 'country', subject-verb agreement). Start with a clear statement of preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because it is very diverse and offers many natural landscapes. For example, there are coastal areas, mountains and forests that I want to explore, and I still have many places left to visit.

× Yes, I like taking picture and I usually visit any new places that time I take photos.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures and I usually visit any new place; at that time I take photos.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking' implies multiple photos. 'Any new places' is unnatural; use 'any new place' or 'new places' depending on meaning. The phrase 'that time I take photos' is awkward; 'at that time I take photos' clarifies timing. Improve by matching singular/plural forms and natural collocations.

× For example last week I had visited a water furniture and I have taken a lot of pictures there.

✓ For example, last week I visited a waterfront and I took a lot of pictures there.

Use simple past 'visited' for a completed action at a specific time ('last week') rather than past perfect 'had visited'. 'Have taken' should be simple past 'took' to match 'last week'. 'Water furniture' is incorrect collocation; likely 'waterfront'. Use consistent past tense for events that occurred at a definite past time.

× I personally prefer urban views because there are a lot of modern, uh, high rise building.

✓ I personally prefer urban views because there are a lot of modern, high-rise buildings.

'High rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective modifying 'buildings', and 'building' must be plural 'buildings' to agree with 'a lot of'. Remove filler 'uh'. Ensure adjective form and plurality are correct.

× Especially I love, uh, rooftop view.

✓ Especially, I love rooftop views.

'Rooftop view' should be plural 'rooftop views' to match general preference. 'Love' is present tense and is fine for a general statement; just adjust noun number. Remove filler 'uh'.

× Uh, almost every day I visited my uh, rooftop and I've taken picture.

✓ Almost every day I visit my rooftop and I take pictures.

If the student means a habitual action, use present simple 'visit' and 'take' rather than past 'visited' or present perfect 'I've taken'. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures'. Remove filler 'uh'. If they meant a past habit no longer true, use 'visited' and 'took pictures'.

× Definitely my contest because my country is a diverse country, there are a lot of places which offers nature and I still do not visit a lot of places.

✓ Definitely my country, because my country is diverse; there are a lot of places that offer natural scenery and I still have not visited many of them.

'My contest' is incorrect; should be 'my country'. 'Which offers' should be 'that offer' to agree with plural 'places'. Use 'natural scenery' instead of 'nature' for clearer collocation. 'I still do not visit a lot of places' is awkward; use present perfect 'have not visited' and 'many of them' to refer back to 'places'. Ensure pronouns and verb agreement match plural subjects.