视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Tập giảm bớt từ lặp (ví dụ: 'actually', 'a lot of the time') và tránh câu dài lặp lại. Nên trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết cụ thể với liên kết logic (ví dụ: 'for example', 'so'). Cố gắng dùng từ vựng phong phú hơn liên quan đến nhiếp ảnh (ví dụ: 'capture', 'landscapes', 'composition').

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy capturing different views, especially when I explore new areas. For example, I often take landscape photos to remember a place or to show friends how to get somewhere, so they can see landmarks and find their way easily.

建议: Giảm tiếng ồn lời nói (hesitations như 'uh', 'actually') và sửa ngữ pháp, cụm từ không chính xác (ví dụ: 'crowded and polluted'). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng ('I prefer rural areas') rồi giải thích với lý do cụ thể và một ví dụ ngắn. Dùng liên từ để mạch lạc ('because', 'so', 'therefore').

示例: I prefer rural areas because they are usually peaceful and less crowded. For instance, countryside views often have open fields and clean air, which makes outdoor photography more relaxing and enjoyable.

建议: Tránh nói quá chung chung và lặp từ ('actually', 'personally'). Bắt đầu bằng câu trả lời rõ ràng ('I prefer views in my own country') rồi nêu lý do, kèm ví dụ cụ thể và mô tả chi tiết hơn (ví dụ: màu sắc, hình dáng, cảm giác). Sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: 'beautiful' cần danh từ miêu tả như 'beautiful scenery').

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I am familiar with the landscapes and cultural scenes. For example, Ha Long Bay offers dramatic limestone karsts and emerald water, which create stunning scenery that I love photographing.

× For instance, when I'm exploring around new areas or like I'm sending directions to my friends, I might take some pictures to illustrate them and help my friend navigate.

✓ For instance, when I'm exploring new areas or sending directions to my friends, I might take some pictures to illustrate them and help my friends navigate.

The phrase 'or like I'm sending' is colloquial and redundant; after 'or' parallel structure requires the base verb form with -ing to match 'exploring' (gerund). Also 'help my friend navigate' should use plural 'friends' to match 'my friends' mentioned earlier or be consistent; here we change to 'help my friends navigate'. Suggestion: use parallel gerunds and consistent plurality: 'exploring... or sending' and 'my friends'.

× Well, I think it actually depends, but most of the time I actually prefer rural areas, mainly because it's like peaceful, quiet and relaxing.

✓ Well, I think it depends, but most of the time I prefer rural areas, mainly because they are peaceful, quiet and relaxing.

Using 'it's like peaceful' is incorrect because 'it' is a singular pronoun while 'rural areas' is plural; use 'they are' to agree in number. Also 'like' is a filler and unnecessary. Suggestion: remove filler words and make subject-verb number agreement: 'they are peaceful'. Use commas to separate adjectives.

× And uh, uh, because urban areas are like more crowded polluted in uh, it gives up.

✓ Urban areas, on the other hand, are more crowded and polluted, which I dislike.

Original sentence has disfluencies ('uh'), incorrect word order ('more crowded polluted in'), and vague ending 'it gives up'. Restructure to a clear sentence: state contrast with 'on the other hand', use correct conjunction 'and' between adjectives, and express the speaker's feeling with 'which I dislike'. Remove fillers.

× Well this can be really subjective, depends on the person.

✓ Well, this can be really subjective; it depends on the person.

The clause 'depends on the person' is missing an explicit subject. Add 'it' to form a complete sentence and use punctuation to join related ideas. Suggestion: 'this can be really subjective; it depends on the person.'

× For me personally, I actually still enjoy views in my own country, especially in places like Halong Bay where there's a lot of mountains and beautiful.

✓ For me personally, I still enjoy views in my own country, especially in places like Halong Bay where there are many mountains and beautiful scenery.

'There's a lot of mountains' mixes singular 'there's' with plural 'mountains'; use 'there are'. Also 'and beautiful' is incomplete as an adjective without a noun; add 'scenery' to complete the idea. Remove unnecessary 'actually'. Suggestion: 'there are many mountains and beautiful scenery.'