视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and clearer: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors, and keep to under five sentences. Also use precise vocabulary (e.g., "photos", "memories", "look through").

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views because they capture special memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes, and later when I feel down I look through these photos to cheer myself up. They help me remember places and moments clearly.

建议: Answer directly and use linking words for support. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, article use) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., "prefer rural areas because of the greenery and peace"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and give a brief reason and one example if possible.

示例: I prefer photographing rural areas because they have abundant greenery and a peaceful atmosphere. For instance, I like taking pictures of fields and forests since the natural light and calm surroundings make the images more appealing.

建议: Give a clear direct answer (own country or others) and support briefly with specific reason(s). Avoid filler words and repetition. Use correct phrasing for place names and prepositions (e.g., "in Canada" not "in this Canada"). Keep responses concise and coherent with linking words such as "because" or "so".

示例: I prefer photographing views in my current city, Prince George, Canada, because it offers diverse scenery and pleasant spots year-round. For example, the riverfront and nearby forests provide great subjects, and looking at those photos later always lifts my mood.

× Absolutely yes.

✓ Absolutely.

The response 'Absolutely yes.' uses both an adverb and a particle redundantly. 'Absolutely' alone appropriately and naturally answers the yes/no question. Use a single adverb or 'Yes' for brevity and correctness.

× I would like to take a photograph of the views like it contains some time, memories and memory.

✓ I like taking photographs of views because they capture moments and memories.

The original sentence has awkward structure and repetition ('memories and memory') and incorrect phrase 'contains some time.' Reorganize the sentence: use 'I like taking photographs of views' and explain purpose with 'because they capture moments and memories.' This provides clarity and grammatical cohesion.

× It makes my day memorable when I click pictures and when I feel sad I just open my gallery and do you some photographs in it and that makes me happy sometime.

✓ It brightens my day when I take pictures, and when I feel sad I open my gallery and look at the photos; that makes me happy sometimes.

Use consistent present simple tense ('take pictures' rather than colloquial 'click pictures'). 'Do you some photographs' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'look at the photos.' Use 'sometimes' instead of 'sometime' for occasional frequency. Also use punctuation or conjunctions to connect clauses clearly.

× Well, I think that rural areas is much good to take a photograph like what we see in dural areas that it contains so much greenery portion and also that environment is very full of peace and we feel very energetic in that environment rather than in urban areas.

✓ Well, I think rural areas are much better for taking photographs because they have so much greenery, and the environment is peaceful, which makes us feel more energetic than in urban areas.

Subject-verb agreement: 'rural areas' is plural and requires 'are' (ID 27 also covers this but primary issue is plural agreement). 'Much good' is incorrect—use 'much better' or 'better.' 'Dural' is a typo for 'rural.' 'Greenery portion' is unnatural; use 'so much greenery.' Rephrase for natural word order and clarity.

× Well, currently I'm residing in Prince George and I prefer to be used in this country, in this city, like in this Canada, in Prince George.

✓ Currently I'm residing in Prince George, and I prefer living in this country and this city, here in Canada.

'Prefer to be used in this country' is incorrect and unclear. Use 'prefer living in' or 'prefer to live in.' Reduce redundant prepositions 'in this city, like in this Canada'; use 'here in Canada' or 'in Canada.' Ensure correct preposition 'in' with places and remove unnecessary repetition.

× Like, uh, this place is very beautiful and it is like we cannot feel bored in this city.

✓ This place is very beautiful, and we never get bored in this city.

Avoid filler words ('like, uh') and repetitive 'like.' 'Cannot feel bored' is awkward; use 'never get bored.' Make the sentence concise and natural.

× We can take pictures and whenever we feel sad, we can look at them.

✓ We can take pictures, and whenever we feel sad we can look at them.

This sentence is mostly correct; only punctuation/commas adjusted for fluency. Present simple 'can take' and 'feel' are appropriate. Keep consistent present tense and remove unnecessary comma after 'sad' if desired.