视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable and relevant but has repetition and lacks cohesion. Reduce redundancy, use one clear topic sentence, and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Also avoid informal fillers and check grammar (e.g., "sceneries" -> "scenery").

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views, especially when I travel. For example, I like capturing coastal sunsets because the changing light creates dramatic colours, and then I often share the best shots on my social media to document my trips.

建议: The response answers the question but contains hesitations, repetition, grammar errors and short, disjointed details. Provide a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, because, since) to give specific reasons and a concrete example. Correct verb tenses and phrasing (e.g., "I always lived downtown").

示例: I prefer urban views because I grew up in the city and feel more connected to busy streets and modern architecture. For example, I enjoy photographing glass skyscrapers at dusk since the reflected light creates interesting patterns.

建议: Good content and enthusiasm, but there are grammar and article errors and an incomplete final sentence. Use correct verb forms and articles (e.g., "I have a wanderlust" -> "I have wanderlust" or "I am a traveller"), and finish thoughts. Add a linking word to compare both options and give a clear preference or balanced view.

示例: I enjoy views in other countries because I love exploring different architectural styles and trying local cuisines. However, I also appreciate landscapes at home, and I plan to visit many unexplored spots in my country in the future.

× I enjoy photographing and also I'm really into it and I enjoy.

✓ I enjoy photographing; I'm really into it.

The original sentence is repetitive and awkward. 'I enjoy photographing and also I'm really into it and I enjoy' repeats 'enjoy' unnecessarily. Use the present participle 'photographing' correctly and combine ideas with a semicolon or 'and' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: remove duplicate clause and keep one clear statement such as 'I enjoy photographing' or 'I'm really into photographing.'

× I find it interesting to post this on my social media.

✓ I find it interesting to post these on my social media.

The demonstrative 'this' does not agree with the plural noun 'pictures' implied earlier. Use 'these' to refer to photos in general. Also 'on my social media' is acceptable; ensure number agreement between demonstrative and what it refers to. Suggestion: ensure demonstratives match the noun number: 'this photo' or 'these photos.'

× I definitely prefer, uh, sites in urban, I definitely prefer, uh, views in urban areas 'cause, uh, when I was a child, I always live, I lived in the downtown of the city and I feel connected to places like that.

✓ I definitely prefer views in urban areas because when I was a child I lived downtown and I felt connected to places like that.

Multiple issues: 'sites in urban' is incorrect preposition and word choice; use 'views in urban areas.' 'Cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. Tense inconsistency: 'I always live, I lived' mixes present and past; use past 'I lived' and follow with past 'felt' for consistent narrative. 'In the downtown of the city' is wordy; 'downtown' suffices. Suggestion: use 'views in urban areas' and keep past tense when describing childhood: 'when I was a child I lived downtown and I felt connected.'

× Then I am surrounded by a lot of people.

✓ I was surrounded by a lot of people then.

Tense mismatch: describing past habit should use past tense 'was surrounded' rather than present 'am surrounded.' Also 'then' is better placed after the clause. The definite article is not the main issue but placement and tense are corrected here; original instruction restricts corrections to listed types — tense issue fits 'Past tense issue' (ID 5) as well. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for past descriptions: 'I was surrounded by a lot of people.'

× The building's modern building.

✓ The buildings were modern.

Original is redundant and ungrammatical: 'The building's modern building' repeats 'building' and misuses the possessive contraction. If referring to multiple buildings in downtown, use plural 'buildings' and past tense 'were' to match the context. Alternatively, 'The buildings were modern' or 'The building was modern.' Suggestion: choose singular or plural consistently and avoid repetition: 'The building was modern.'

× Personally, I has a wanderlust and I need to travel a lot.

✓ Personally, I have wanderlust and I need to travel a lot.

Subject 'I' requires the verb form 'have,' not 'has.' Also 'a wanderlust' is incorrect because 'wanderlust' is an uncountable noun; omit the article 'a.' Suggestion: use 'I have wanderlust' or 'I have a strong desire to travel.'

× I find it interesting to explore a new cultures, a new styles of architecture and also try a local cuisine in other countries.

✓ I find it interesting to explore new cultures, new styles of architecture, and to try local cuisines in other countries.

Number agreement errors: 'a new cultures' and 'a new styles' improperly combine singular article with plural nouns. Remove 'a' and make nouns plural. Also parallel structure is improved by using 'to explore' and 'to try' or making all verbs gerunds. 'Local cuisine' can be pluralized to 'local cuisines' when referring to different countries. Suggestion: maintain parallelism and correct number: 'explore new cultures, new styles of architecture, and try local cuisines.'

× But at the same time I have a lot of places in my native country that I haven't.

✓ But at the same time I have many places in my native country that I haven't visited yet.

The clause 'that I haven't' is incomplete; it needs a past participle verb to complete the meaning (e.g., 'visited'). This is a sentence structure error — missing complement. Also 'a lot of places' is acceptable but 'many places' suits formal speech and 'visited yet' clarifies intention. Suggestion: add the past participle 'visited' and optionally 'yet' to express incompleteness: 'places that I haven't visited yet.'