视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitations and repetition, use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and avoid fillers like “uh.” Mention a specific example to make the answer more concrete.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes and city scenes because photos help me remember special moments. For example, when I visited the seaside last year I took a series of sunset photos that I later printed and hung on my wall.

建议: Start with a direct statement (urban or rural) then give a reason and a specific example. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition, and use linking words (e.g., because, however). Pronunciation and word choice should be clearer (e.g., ‘breathtaking views’ not ‘news’).

示例: It depends on my mood, but generally I prefer urban views because I love city skylines at night. For instance, I enjoy going to rooftops to photograph illuminated buildings and busy streets because the lights create dramatic reflections and patterns.

建议: Fix basic grammar (use ‘I have’ and ‘I prefer views in other countries’) and remove hesitations. Provide one clear reason plus a specific example (e.g., a place you visited) to show concrete experience. Use linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example.’

示例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling exposes me to new architecture and cultural scenes. For example, visiting Barcelona last year allowed me to photograph Gaudí’s unique buildings, which gave me fresh ideas for my photography.

× I love capturing photos, uh, capturing, uh, beautiful sceneries whenever I'm travel, uh, taking photos, uh, or shots is uh, also, uh, a great tool to freeze a moment and also enjoy, uh, post these shots on my social media.

✓ I love capturing photos, especially beautiful scenery, whenever I'm traveling; taking photos or shots is also a great way to freeze a moment and to post these shots on my social media.

The phrase 'whenever I'm travel' uses the base verb 'travel' after a form of 'be' where the present participle 'traveling' is required to indicate continuous action. Also 'sceneries' is nonstandard; 'scenery' is an uncountable noun. 'A great tool' is awkward for an action; 'a great way' fits better. Suggestions: use present participle after 'I'm' (I'm traveling), use uncountable 'scenery', and choose collocations like 'a great way' and parallel infinitives 'to freeze' and 'to post'.

× Honest honestly, it depends on my mood and how I'm feeling when I am uplifted.

✓ Honestly, it depends on my mood and how I'm feeling when I am uplifted.

The student repeated 'Honest honestly,' which is redundant and incorrect. Use the adverb 'Honestly' to introduce a personal opinion. Suggestion: avoid repeating similar words and use a single appropriate adverb.

× I prefer to stay in the downtown and enjoy this breathtaking news, especially from rooftop and you know this city night, city night skyscapes I.

✓ I prefer to stay downtown and enjoy the breathtaking views, especially from rooftops, like the city night skyscapes.

Several issues: 'in the downtown' should be 'downtown' or 'in downtown' depending on dialect; 'this breathtaking news' is incorrect—'views' fits the context; 'from rooftop' needs plural or an article: 'from rooftops' or 'from the rooftop'; the fragment 'city night skyscapes I' is ungrammatical and likely intended as 'city night skyscapes.' Suggestions: use correct noun 'views', correct place expressions 'stay downtown', and ensure word order produces a complete clause.

× I has a wanderlust and due to this factor, I need to travel a lot.

✓ I have a wanderlust, and because of that, I need to travel a lot.

The verb 'has' does not agree with the subject 'I'; the correct form is 'have.' Also 'due to this factor' is awkward; 'because of that' or 'due to this' reads more naturally. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement ('I have') and use natural linking phrases.

× I, uh, prefer, uh, different countries. It allows me to refresh my perspective on life and also assess, uh, and see, explore a, uh, different styles of architecture and, uh, uh, their traditions, cultures.

✓ I prefer different countries. They allow me to refresh my perspective on life and also to see and explore different styles of architecture and their traditions and cultures.

The pronoun 'It' incorrectly refers to 'different countries' (plural), so use 'They.' Also 'assess, uh, and see, explore' is disfluent and the parallel structure is broken; use parallel infinitives 'to see and explore.' 'A different styles' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' to match plural 'styles.' Suggestions: match pronoun number ('they'), maintain parallel verb forms, and ensure article-noun agreement.