视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitation and redundancy, use clear sentence structure and more specific detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two concise supporting points using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, um).

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like capturing beautiful landscapes when I travel, and I often share my best shots on social media because they help me remember the trip. For instance, last year I photographed a sunset over a mountain range and posted it with a short description of the location.

建议: Answer directly then give a reason and an example. Use linking words (however, because) to contrast preferences and reduce repetition. Keep to one clear idea per sentence and avoid broken phrases.

示例: It depends on my mood: sometimes I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and architecture, but other times I choose rural scenes for peace and natural beauty. For example, I like photographing busy streets and cafes when I want lively images, whereas I visit the countryside when I want calm landscapes.

建议: Use correct grammar and concise phrasing: state preference clearly, then explain with specific reasons. Replace awkward phrases with common collocations (have wanderlust, broaden my perspective). Limit to 2–3 sentences and include one specific example.

示例: I enjoy views in other countries because I have a strong desire to travel and broaden my perspective. For example, visiting Europe allowed me to compare different architectural styles, which inspired my photography; however, I also appreciate the familiar landscapes of my home country.

× Definitely, I'd like capture in, uh, definitely I like capturing, uh, uh, beautiful scenery.

✓ Definitely, I'd like to capture, uh, beautiful scenery. I especially like capturing beautiful scenery.

The student used 'I'd like capture' which is incorrect because 'like' when followed by a verb of desire requires the base infinitive with to ('like to capture' or contraction 'I'd like to capture'). Also the sentence was repetitive and disfluent; cleaning the structure and using 'capturing' correctly for a habitual preference improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'I'd like to capture' for a specific desire and 'I like capturing' for a general habit. Applicable grammar problem type ID: 8

× Umm, especially I prefer to share these, uh, shots on my social media.

✓ Umm, especially, I prefer to share these shots on my social media.

The main issue is not verb tense but unnecessary fillers and punctuation; 'prefer to share' is present tense and correct for habits. Minor correction removes disfluencies and adds commas. Suggestion: keep the present simple 'I prefer to share' to express habitual preference. Applicable grammar problem type ID: 6

× Uh, sometimes a picture is worth a, uh, more than 1000 words.

✓ Uh, sometimes a picture is worth more than 1000 words.

The phrase contained an extra indefinite article 'a' before 'more than 1000 words' which is incorrect. The idiom is 'a picture is worth more than a thousand words' or 'a picture is worth more than 1000 words' without the extra 'a'. Suggestion: remove the extra 'a' or use the full idiom 'a picture is worth more than a thousand words.' Applicable grammar problem type ID: 22

× Uh, to be honest, uh, it, uh, no. To be honest, it depends on my mood and how I'm feeling.

✓ To be honest, it depends on my mood and how I'm feeling.

The original included disfluencies and an isolated 'no' that broke sentence structure. Removing fillers produces a grammatically correct response in present simple tense. Suggestion: avoid filler words and keep one clear sentence: 'To be honest, it depends on my mood.' Applicable grammar problem type ID: 26

× I like this hustle bustle on in urban areas, especially when I live in a downtown and this hectic.

✓ I like the hustle and bustle in urban areas, especially when I live downtown; it's hectic.

Errors: missing articles ('the hustle and bustle'), incorrect preposition 'on in' (use 'in'), wrong use of 'a downtown' (use 'downtown' or 'the downtown area'), and awkward clause 'this hectic' (should be 'it's hectic'). Suggestion: use fixed phrase 'the hustle and bustle', 'in urban areas', and 'it's hectic' to describe the atmosphere. Applicable grammar problem type ID: 11

× I has have a wanderlust, I always crave for new excitement and due to this factor I need to travel.

✓ I have wanderlust; I always crave new excitement, and because of that I need to travel.

Mistakes: 'I has have' is an incorrect verb form and redundant; correct is 'I have'. 'Crave for' is nonstandard in English; use 'crave' without 'for'. 'Due to this factor' is awkward; use 'because of that' or 'for this reason'. Suggestion: use 'I have wanderlust' and 'I always crave new excitement' for natural phrasing. Applicable grammar problem type ID: 12

× And of course my own native country is so beautiful, but at the same time I want a refresh the perspective of all other countries and their cultures and also to assess their architecture.

✓ Of course my native country is beautiful, but at the same time I want to refresh my perspective by visiting other countries, learning about their cultures, and seeing their architecture.

Errors: 'a refresh the perspective' is incorrect word order and article usage; use verb 'refresh' with object 'my perspective'. 'All other countries' is exaggerated and awkward; 'other countries' is sufficient. 'Assess their architecture' is slightly formal and odd in this context; 'seeing their architecture' or 'exploring their architecture' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'refresh my perspective' and parallel gerund phrases 'visiting..., learning..., seeing...' for clarity. Applicable grammar problem type ID: 13