视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and repetition, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific detail or brief reason using a linking word (for example or because) to make the answer more informative.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. When I travel I usually capture landscapes and architecture because they show the character of a place. For example, I like photographing old churches and colorful markets to remember the atmosphere.

建议: Clarify and correct vocabulary, avoid repetition and long awkward phrases. Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons linked with because or so. Replace unclear terms (e.g. 'Polish stones and medals long buildings') with precise language like 'concrete blocks' or 'high-rise buildings.'

示例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy open fields and natural scenery. For example, I like rolling hills and rivers, which feel more peaceful than the concrete high-rises and busy streets of the city.

建议: Avoid repetition and tighten the answer: give one clear reason and a single concrete example. Use linking words such as because or for instance, and reduce repeated phrases like 'I'm I'm' and repeated adjectives.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I have a personal connection to familiar landscapes. For instance, I grew up near mountains and rivers, so I enjoy visiting the parks and viewpoints that remind me of home.

× Yes, I of course enjoy taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I of course enjoy taking pictures of different views.

The sentence is acceptable but 'of course' is an adverbial phrase that is better placed with commas: 'Yes, I, of course, enjoy...'. This clarifies the sentence rhythm and emphasis. Suggestion: place 'of course' between commas to set it off as a parenthetical phrase.

× When I travel, I usually take pictures like landscape, buildings, flowers and other aesthetic beauties.

✓ When I travel, I usually take pictures of landscapes, buildings, flowers and other beautiful things.

'Pictures like' is awkward; use 'pictures of' to indicate subjects. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match the list. 'Aesthetic beauties' is unnatural; use 'beautiful things' or simply 'beautiful scenes'. Suggestion: use 'pictures of' and plural nouns for a general list.

× Well I prefer views in rural areas as as I'm fed up of seeing the Polish stones and medals long buildings.

✓ Well, I prefer views in rural areas as I'm fed up with seeing long, stony, and metallic buildings in Poland.

Problems: double 'as as' is a typing error; English uses 'fed up with' not 'fed up of'. 'Polish stones and medals long buildings' is unclear and ungrammatical. I inferred intended meaning: buildings in Poland that look long, stony, or metallic. Suggestion: remove duplicate word, use 'fed up with', reorder adjectives before nouns and place country reference clearly.

× While I enjoy rural life, they're simple living and beautiful sceneries.

✓ While I enjoy rural life, it's simple living and beautiful scenery.

'They're' (they are) does not agree with singular 'rural life'; use 'it's' (it is). 'Sceneries' is usually uncountable—use 'scenery'. Also 'simple living' is a noun phrase describing lifestyle; keep it singular. Suggestion: match pronoun number to 'rural life' and use 'scenery' as uncountable noun.

× Well, of course I prefer view in my country because I'm attached to those views and I'm I'm grown up with those views like beautiful sceneries, beautiful mountains, beautiful rivers and there are lots of parks.

✓ Well, of course I prefer views in my country because I'm attached to them; I grew up with those beautiful scenes, mountains, rivers, and there are lots of parks.

Errors: 'prefer view' should be 'prefer views' (plural). 'I'm I'm grown up' is incorrect—should be 'I grew up' (past tense). 'Sceneries' is better as 'scenes' or 'scenery'. Use 'attached to them' instead of 'attached to those views' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: use plural 'views', correct tense ('grew up'), and replace 'sceneries' with 'scenes'.