视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and avoid filler words. Add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. For example, mention how often you take photos or what kinds of views you prefer.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I often take photos when I travel because I like capturing landscapes and cityscapes to remember the places I visit.

建议: Improve grammar (subject–verb agreement and articles) and reduce fillers. Give one clear reason and a brief example using a linking word like "because" or "for example." Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "closer to nature," "relaxing").

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are closer to nature and feel more relaxing. For example, I enjoy photographing fields and forests where the colors and quiet atmosphere are very calming.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and correct grammar (use plurals and articles). Be concise and then add a specific supporting detail about what matters to you (e.g., scenery type or cultural elements). Use linking words like "because" or "however."

示例: It doesn't matter to me whether the views are in my country or abroad because I mainly care about interesting scenes. For instance, I'm more interested in unique landscapes or cultural architecture regardless of location.

× Yes I do uh, taking picture is one of my hobby and I always do that when I travels.

✓ Yes, I do. Taking pictures is one of my hobbies, and I always do that when I travel.

Missing and incorrect articles and plural forms: 'taking picture' needs plural 'pictures'; 'one of my hobby' requires the article 'one of my' plus plural 'hobbies'; run-on sentence needs punctuation. Also 'travels' is incorrect for first-person present; use 'travel'. Suggestion: use articles and correct plural forms, separate clauses with punctuation.

× Uh, I prefer the views in rural areas because rural areas is nearer to the nature and I think that nature can help people to release stress.

✓ Uh, I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas are nearer to nature, and I think that nature can help people relieve stress.

Subject-verb agreement and article/preposition issues: 'rural areas' is plural so verb must be 'are' not 'is' (ID 27). 'nearer to the nature' incorrectly uses the definite article and preposition; correct is 'nearer to nature' or 'closer to nature' (ID 11 and 22). 'help people to release stress' is awkward; use 'help people relieve stress' (verb choice and infinitive form). Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and omit unnecessary articles.

× And yeah, and I think it's view is more awesome.

✓ And yeah, I think its view is more impressive.

Wrong possessive and adjective choice: 'it's view' uses the contraction 'it's' (it is) incorrectly instead of the possessive 'its' (ID 12 and 13). 'more awesome' is informal and comparative; 'more impressive' is more appropriate. Suggestion: use correct possessive pronoun and choose suitable adjective for formal speech.

× Umm, I don't think that is important that the views is in my country or in other country.

✓ Umm, I don't think it is important whether the views are in my country or in another country.

Tense and agreement errors: 'that is important that the views is' is ungrammatical. Use 'it is important whether' and match plural subject 'views' with 'are' (ID 27 and 6). Also 'other country' should be 'another country' (article use, ID 22). Suggestion: restructure using 'whether' and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I just want to enjoy the the interesting scene scenario.

✓ I just want to enjoy the interesting scenery.

Awkward word choice and repetition: 'the the' is duplicated and 'interesting scene scenario' is incorrect collocation. Use 'scenery' to refer to views (ID 26 and 13). Suggestion: remove duplicate words and use correct noun 'scenery'.

× And yeah, in short, it's it's it doesn't matter.

✓ And yeah, in short, it doesn't matter.

Redundancy and contraction misuse: repeated words 'it's it's it' create confusion. Use a single clause 'it doesn't matter' in present simple (ID 6). Suggestion: remove repetitions and use correct negative contraction.