视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like taking pictures, then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid slang like "wanna" and vague phrases like "feel with it." Use past/present simple consistently and keep to under five sentences.

示例: I don’t often take pictures, although I enjoy beautiful views. If I see a particularly striking scene, I sometimes stop to take a photo because it helps me remember the moment. However, photography is not my main hobby, so I usually just take a few shots and then continue enjoying the view.

建议: Answer directly first (urban or rural), then give one clear reason and a specific detail or example. Use correct sentence endings and avoid informal contractions. Link ideas with words like "because" or "so" and finish the sentence properly.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because the countryside feels much more peaceful. For example, I enjoy walking by rivers and fields where the air is quieter and I can relax, unlike the noisy streets of the city.

建议: State your preference clearly and support it with a specific reason and an example. Replace informal words with standard language and use linking words such as "therefore" correctly to connect ideas. Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad gives me eye-opening experiences. For instance, I would like to see the architecture in London or Milan, which offer very different and memorable cityscapes compared with my hometown.

× If I can find different gorgeous views, I will only concentrate on it because I wanna feel with it.

✓ If I can find different gorgeous views, I will just concentrate on them because I want to take them in.

Errors: 'only' placement and pronoun agreement; 'concentrate on it' uses singular pronoun for plural 'views'; 'wanna' is informal and 'feel with it' is ungrammatical. Change 'only' to 'just' for natural emphasis; use plural pronoun 'them' to match 'views'; use 'take them in' (phrasal verb) instead of 'feel with it'. Also 'wanna' should be 'want to' in formal speech. Suggestion: practice using correct object pronouns for plural nouns and choose appropriate -ing or infinitive structures (here 'want to take' + object) rather than 'wanna feel with'.

× Beside, taking picture is not my cup of tea, so that's not my good choice.

✓ Besides, taking pictures is not my cup of tea, so it's not a good choice for me.

Errors: 'Beside' should be 'Besides' (sentence connector). 'taking picture' needs plural 'pictures' or the gerund phrase 'taking pictures' to be idiomatic. 'that's not my good choice' is unidiomatic; use 'it's not a good choice for me'. Suggestion: use 'Besides' to connect ideas, use plural with general activities (taking pictures), and use natural collocations like 'not my cup of tea' and 'a good choice for me'.

× I have lived in urban areas since I was born so I wanna have a time to watch a view in rural area to make me feel peaceful or comfortable because in urban it's really.

✓ I have lived in urban areas since I was born, so I want to spend some time enjoying a view in the countryside to feel peaceful and comfortable, because the city can be stressful.

Errors: 'wanna' informal; 'have a time to watch a view' is unnatural—use 'spend some time enjoying a view' or 'take time to enjoy a view'. 'rural area' should be 'the countryside' or 'rural areas' with article. The clause 'because in urban it's really' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Replace with a complete idea 'because the city can be stressful.' Suggestion: use 'have lived... since' correctly to express continuous residency; use natural verbs for leisure (spend time, enjoy), include articles where needed, and finish incomplete clauses with clear adjectives or reasons.

× I have lived in my own country since I was born, therefore I wanna travel abroad to have eye opening experience and have another gorgeous view such as London or Milan.

✓ I have lived in my own country since I was born; therefore I want to travel abroad to have an eye-opening experience and see other gorgeous views, such as those in London or Milan.

Errors: 'wanna' informal; 'eye opening' needs a hyphen 'eye-opening' as a compound adjective; 'have another gorgeous view' is awkward—use 'see other gorgeous views' and pluralize to match examples. Also include article 'an' before 'eye-opening experience'. Suggestion: use formal 'want to', hyphenate compound adjectives, match singular/plural forms, and use verbs that collocate with 'views' (see, enjoy).