视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief reason and a personal detail. Avoid vague phrases like “and such” and repetitive language. Use a linking word when adding the reason (e.g., “because”) and keep responses to at most 3–4 short sentences.

示例: Not really. I find taking photos of views a bit dull because I prefer being present in the moment rather than framing shots. However, I understand why others enjoy it, as photography can capture memories and details we might otherwise miss.

建议: Open with a direct topic sentence and give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because” / “for example”). Avoid redundancy (don’t repeat choice). Add a concrete detail to support your preference.

示例: I prefer rural views because they often feel more peaceful and offer unique landscapes. For example, I like the wide fields and old farmhouses that you rarely see in cities, so I find them more interesting to look at and photograph.

建议: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement, give one specific example and a reason using linking words (e.g., “for example,” “because”). Remove redundant phrases like “as I said” and “usually in obviously.”

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering different landscapes and cultures. For example, rural Japan appeals to me — its terraced rice fields and small temples offer a peaceful, distinctive atmosphere I don't often see at home.

× I believe that it is a boring activity to do, but I do know that some people enjoy taking pictures of different views and such and I respect that.

✓ I believe that it is a boring activity, but I know that some people enjoy taking pictures of different views, and I respect that.

The phrase 'a boring activity to do' is wordy and uses an unnecessary infinitive; 'a boring activity' is more natural. 'I do know' is redundant for simple statement; use 'I know'. Also add commas to improve readability and separate clauses. Suggestion: simplify phrases and remove redundant auxiliaries.

× I prefer views in rural areas because it seems very underappreciated by a lot of people.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they seem very underappreciated by a lot of people.

Subject-verb reference is inconsistent: 'views' is plural so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'seem'. Using 'it seems' incorrectly treats 'views' as singular. Suggestion: match pronouns and verbs to plural nouns.

× Therefore, if I were to choose, I would definitely enjoy photography in rural areas other than urban areas.

✓ Therefore, if I were to choose, I would definitely enjoy taking photographs in rural areas rather than in urban areas.

The noun 'photography' is acceptable but 'enjoy photography in rural areas other than urban areas' is awkward. 'Rather than' is the correct comparative connector, and 'taking photographs' is a clearer verb phrase. Also include 'in' before 'urban areas' for parallel structure. Suggestion: use parallel prepositional phrases and clearer verb forms.

× For me, I prefer views in other countries because I would really love to explore the scenery in other places, for example in Japan, usually in obviously rural areas of Japan, because I feel, as I said, it's very underappreciated.

✓ For me, I prefer views in other countries because I would really love to explore the scenery in places like Japan, usually in rural areas, because I feel, as I said, they are very underappreciated.

Pronoun reference and tense: 'scenery in other places, for example in Japan, usually in obviously rural areas of Japan' is repetitive and awkward. Use 'places like Japan' and avoid repeating 'Japan'. 'It's very underappreciated' incorrectly refers to plural 'rural areas' or 'views'; use 'they are very underappreciated' or 'it is underappreciated' with a clear singular noun. Also remove redundant adverbs like 'obviously'. Suggestion: simplify and ensure pronoun agrees with the noun it replaces.