视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct minor grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one specific example to make your answer more concrete. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas and correct article and plural errors (e.g., “a new place,” “those moments”). Keep to at most 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. I love photographing views because it helps me keep memories of places I visit. For example, when I visited the seaside last summer, I took several photos of the sunrise to remind myself of that peaceful moment.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then provide 1–2 specific contrasts using linking words like while or whereas. Correct word choice (e.g., “prefer to take photos” instead of “click”) and grammar (pluralization) will improve clarity. Keep answer to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer both rural and urban views because they offer different kinds of beauty. For instance, in rural areas I photograph green fields and grazing cows, whereas in cities I focus on skyline shots and historic buildings.

建议: Begin with a clear, direct sentence. Avoid vague phrasing and repetitions. Use linking words (however, although) to contrast if needed and give a specific example of a favorite view at home or abroad. Fix grammar (e.g., “I prefer views in my country and abroad,” “I don't mind taking photos”) and avoid unclear words like “ruler.” Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

示例: I enjoy views both in my country and abroad because I focus on the scenery rather than the location. For example, I once photographed a mountain range while traveling overseas that reminded me of similar hills back home, so location doesn't matter to me as long as the view is striking.

× Whenever I go to new place, I always click the pictures so that I can have memory of that moments and I can refresh my memory whenever I have free time or whenever I'm alone.

✓ Whenever I go to a new place, I always take pictures so that I can have a memory of those moments and refresh my memory whenever I have free time or am alone.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'new place' (Article error, affects present tense sentence), use of 'click the pictures' is unnatural — 'take pictures' is the correct collocation in English, 'have memory of that moments' has number agreement and article problems: 'a memory' and plural 'those moments', and repetitive 'whenever I'm alone' used with 'I can' is wordy. Suggestion: use 'Whenever I go to a new place' + 'take pictures' + 'a memory of those moments' and simplify 'whenever I have free time or am alone.' (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× Whenever I go to new place, I always click the pictures so that I can have memory of that moments and I can refresh my memory whenever I have free time or whenever I'm alone.

✓ Whenever I go to a new place, I always take pictures so that I can have a memory of those moments and refresh my memory whenever I have free time or am alone.

Errors: 'new place' needs article 'a' and 'that moments' is incorrect plural form; should be 'those moments' or 'that moment' depending on meaning. Also 'click the pictures' is not idiomatic; 'take pictures' is preferred. Suggestion: correct articles and plural forms and use natural verb collocation. (Grammar problem type ID:1)

× I love to capture the scenery and the views.

✓ I love capturing scenery and views.

Both 'love to capture' and 'love capturing' are grammatical, but 'love capturing scenery and views' is more natural and concise. Also articles before uncountable 'scenery' and plural 'views' can be omitted. Suggestion: use gerund for natural speech and drop unnecessary 'the.' (Grammar problem type ID:8)

× I don't mind whenever I go to rural areas, I love to capture the scenery of cows, green fields and in urban areas I like to picture the cities, big buildings and the historical places.

✓ I don't mind; when I go to rural areas I love to capture the scenery of cows and green fields, and in urban areas I like to photograph cities, tall buildings and historic places.

Problems: 'whenever' is used awkwardly; 'when' is better here. Sentence run-on and coordination issues; needs punctuation and conjunctions. 'capture the scenery of cows' is unnatural — 'scenery of cows' should be 'scenery of cows and green fields' or 'countryside scenes with cows.' 'picture the cities' should be 'photograph cities.' 'the historical places' is better as 'historic places.' Suggestion: split ideas with commas and conjunctions, use correct verbs and adjective forms. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× I prefer view in my country and in other countries as well.

✓ I prefer views in my country and in other countries as well.

'View' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally. Also use 'in my country' and 'in other countries' — those are fine. Suggestion: use plural to express general preference. (Grammar problem type ID:22)

× As I mentioned that I don't mind to click pictures, I just get amazed by the views.

✓ As I mentioned, I don't mind taking pictures; I just get amazed by the views.

Problems: unnecessary 'that' after 'mentioned' and incorrect verb form 'to click pictures' — use 'taking pictures.' Pronoun/connector use and infinitive choice. Suggestion: remove 'that' and use gerund 'taking pictures.' (Grammar problem type ID:12)

× So the view is better to me, not the place like it.

✓ What matters to me is the view, not the place itself.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'The view is better to me' is awkward; better expressed as 'What matters to me is the view.' 'not the place like it' is incorrect structure; use 'not the place itself.' Suggestion: rephrase to clarify contrast between view and place. (Grammar problem type ID:26)

× Is it my country or another country, ruler or urban?

✓ Whether it is my country or another country, rural or urban, I take pictures when I find the view good.

Problems: 'Is it' phrasing is wrong in context; should be 'whether it is.' 'ruler' is a typo for 'rural.' Also sentence fragments and wrong conjunction. Suggestion: use 'whether' to introduce alternatives and correct 'rural.' (Grammar problem type ID:16)

× I take pictures whenever I find it good.

✓ I take pictures whenever I find a view I like.

'Find it good' is vague and uses pronoun 'it' awkwardly. Better to use a noun phrase 'a view I like.' Suggestion: replace 'it' with a clear noun and use natural collocation. (Grammar problem type ID:10)