视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct verb forms, and give one specific example with a linking phrase. Keep to 2–4 sentences. Also use appropriate collocations (e.g., "urban areas" or "big city skyscrapers").

示例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like photographing big city skylines because the tall skyscrapers and busy streets create dramatic scenes. For example, when I visit a metropolitan city I try to capture the skyline at sunset to show the contrast between light and shadow.

建议: Answer directly with a clear preference or say you like both, then give two specific supporting points using linking words (for example, "because" and "however"). Complete your sentences and avoid repetition. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

示例: I enjoy both urban and rural views for different reasons. Urban areas are exciting because the architecture and busy streets feel adventurous, whereas the countryside is peaceful and offers natural landscapes for calm, detailed photos.

建议: Make a clear statement about your preference and explain why with specific reasons and an example. Organize sentences logically, avoid repetition and correct grammar (e.g., "I have always lived in my country"). Use linking words like "however" or "if" when contrasting ideas.

示例: I mostly prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong personal connection to the places I grew up in. However, if I have the chance to travel abroad, I always try to photograph new landscapes and architecture to broaden my perspective—for instance, I would love to photograph historical buildings in Europe to compare them with those at home.

× MMM, yes, Sir. Uh, I love, uh, taking pictures and I always, always enjoyed while travelling.

✓ I love taking pictures and I have always enjoyed doing so while travelling.

The sentence mixes present simple 'I love' with past simple 'I enjoyed', causing a tense inconsistency. Use present perfect 'have always enjoyed' to express an experience continuing up to now and use 'doing so' or 'taking pictures' after 'enjoyed' for clarity. Also remove unnecessary fillers. Use: 'I love taking pictures and I have always enjoyed doing so while travelling.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and prefer present perfect for experiences that extend to the present.

× Uh, sometimes it depends, uh, on a place where I'm visited.

✓ Sometimes it depends on the place I visit.

The phrase 'where I'm visited' incorrectly uses passive form and present continuous. The intended meaning is an active subject visiting places, so use simple present 'I visit' or 'I visit' for habitual action. Also remove extra 'a' before 'place' or use 'the place'. Use: 'Sometimes it depends on the place I visit.' Suggestion: Use active voice and simple present for habitual actions.

× For example, if I'm in, I travel in a metro cities, so I like to capture, uh, big towers.

✓ For example, when I travel in metropolitan cities, I like to capture large towers.

The original sentence has broken structure and incorrect noun phrase 'a metro cities'. Use 'when I travel in metropolitan cities' to indicate condition/time and correct adjective 'metropolitan' and plural agreement. Replace 'big' with 'large' for formality and remove fillers. Suggestion: Keep clause order: time clause followed by main clause and ensure noun-adjective agreement.

× Both have their own advantages and drawbacks if I talk about myself so I enjoy both.

✓ Both have their own advantages and drawbacks; if I talk about myself, I enjoy both.

The original runs clauses together without proper punctuation. The phrase itself has correct plurality but needs punctuation and linking words. Adding a semicolon or period and comma improves clarity. Suggestion: Use proper punctuation to separate independent clauses.

× I like to enjoy both views in city City sides it gives me adventurous vibes.

✓ I enjoy views in the city; they give me an adventurous vibe.

The original is repetitive ('city City sides') and lacks clear subject for the second clause. Use 'the city' and plural subject 'they' referring to views, and 'adventurous vibe' (singular) or 'adventurous vibes' both acceptable; choose one for consistency. Suggestion: Avoid repetition and ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb.

× On other side countryside give me.

✓ On the other hand, the countryside appeals to me.

The fragment lacks a verb and article; 'On other side' should be 'On the other hand' and 'countryside give me' is incomplete. Provide a complete clause: subject 'the countryside' and verb 'appeals to' or 'gives me a peaceful feeling.' Suggestion: Use common contrast phrase 'on the other hand' and provide a complete verb phrase.

× I experience always in my country because of I always connected from my birth to till now talking about other countries.

✓ I have always had experiences in my country because I have been connected to it since my birth; I can speak about other countries only when I get the chance to visit them.

The original uses incorrect word order and tenses: 'I experience always' should be 'I have always experienced' or 'I have always had experiences'. 'Because of I always connected' is ungrammatical; use present perfect 'have been connected' and 'since my birth.' Also clarify second part about other countries with conditional phrasing. Suggestion: Use present perfect for ongoing states from the past to present and proper clause connectors like 'since' and 'when.'

× Whenever I I have I get chance to visit other nation. So definitely I will take the opportunity and and.

✓ Whenever I get the chance to visit another country, I will definitely take the opportunity.

The original has repetition 'I I have I get' and incorrect noun 'other nation'; use 'another country' and a single, clear conditional clause 'Whenever I get the chance'. Remove redundant 'and and' and maintain future simple 'will take' for intended future action. Suggestion: Eliminate repeated words, use correct noun collocation 'another country', and keep conditional and main clauses concise.