视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Говорите короче и логичнее: начните с прямого ответа («Yes, I do.»), затем добавьте одну-две предложения с причинами и примером. Избегайте лишних слов и просьб типа «Please help me». Упражняйтесь в связующих словах (because, so, for example). Также работайте над произношением и структурой предложений.

示例: Yes, I do. Photography is my hobby because I enjoy capturing interesting scenes. For example, I often take photos of city streets and parks when I walk around my neighbourhood.

建议: Отвечайте прямо и стройно: сначала дайте выбор («I prefer urban areas»), затем объясните причину и приведите конкретный пример. Уберите бессвязные фразы и повторения. Используйте связки (because, so, for example, also) и уточняющие детали (buildings, streets, people).

示例: I prefer urban areas because I live in a city and enjoy its vibrant atmosphere. For example, I like photographing old buildings and busy streets, where there is always something interesting to capture.

建议: Дайте ясный ответ и конкретизируйте причину: назовите черты пейзажей, которые вам нравятся (например, горы, природа, культура). Избегайте неопределённых фраз («future», «pupils») без контекста. Постройте одно или два связных предложения с примерами.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I love its natural landscapes and cultural scenes. For instance, I enjoy photographing the mountains near my hometown and local festivals where people wear traditional clothes.

× Yes, of course, because I like this and this my hobby and. Please help me doing anything.

✓ Yes, of course. I like photography; it is my hobby. Please help me improve.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: fragments, misplaced words, and unclear meaning. It lacks proper clause connections and contains unnecessary repetitions ('this and this'). 'Please help me doing anything' is ungrammatical; the verb 'help' should be followed by the base form or an object + infinitive (help me improve / help me to do something). To improve: separate ideas into clear sentences, remove repetitions, use the noun 'photography' for clarity, and use 'help me improve' or 'help me with anything' for natural requests.

× I prefer views this urban because I live.

✓ I prefer urban views because I live here.

The phrase 'views this urban' is incorrect word order and wrong use of 'this'. Use adjective before noun: 'urban views'. Also add 'here' to complete 'I live here'. To improve: place adjectives before nouns and include necessary adverbs or pronouns to complete location meaning.

× I live in city.

✓ I live in the city.

The noun 'city' needs a definite article when referring to a specific city: 'the city'. Omitting 'the' makes the sentence ungrammatical in this context. Use 'in the city' or 'in a city' depending on meaning.

× This smells down in my town and I study here and I take a photo in my city in this Help me.

✓ There is a bad smell in my town, but I study here and I take photos in my city. Please help me.

The original is a run-on with unclear phrases: 'This smells down' is incorrect; use 'there is a bad smell' or 'it smells bad'. 'Take a photo in my city in this' is nonsensical. Separate clauses with conjunctions and clear connectors. Use plural 'photos' for general activity. Finish with a clear request: 'Please help me.'

× I prefer views in my country because I live here and I prefer future, my country and my beautiful country, this mountain and youth and pupils.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I live here. I love my beautiful country, its mountains, and its young people and students.

The original mixes ideas and misuses prepositions and nouns. 'Prefer future' is incorrect and unclear. Use 'I prefer views in my country' then add clear nouns with possessive 'its' for belonging: 'its mountains' and 'its young people and students'. Also separate into two sentences for clarity.