视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement and tense), reduce redundancy, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words like "because" and "so" correctly and keep answers to under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I love taking photographs when I travel because they help me remember places and moments. For example, I often photograph sunrises and sunsets, and I enjoy sharing my best shots on social media.

建议: Correct article and noun usage, eliminate repetition, and produce one clear reason with a specific detail. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") appropriately and maintain correct verb forms.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are surrounded by lush fields and peaceful scenery. For instance, I like sitting quietly and photographing the landscape from different angles and at different times of day to capture varied lighting.

建议: Avoid grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, list examples clearly, and connect them to your main point with a brief explanation. Keep sentences concise and accurate (use articles and prepositions correctly).

示例: I prefer views in my own country because it has well-preserved heritage sites and scenic hill stations. For example, places like Qutub Minar, Mount Abu, and several waterfalls offer dramatic backdrops that I enjoy photographing.

× I love taking pictures when I travel because they helps me to remember the places and the moment, and I also enjoy sharing my pictures on social media.

✓ I love taking pictures when I travel because they help me to remember the places and the moments, and I also enjoy sharing my pictures on social media.

The pronoun they is plural and must match the plural verb form help (not helps). Also 'the moment' is singular while 'places' is plural; use 'the moments' to keep number consistency. Suggestion: ensure pronoun and verb agree in number and keep parallel nouns consistent in number.

× It's a relaxing hobby and I especially photographed sunrise and sunset.

✓ It's a relaxing hobby and I especially photograph sunrises and sunsets.

The sentence mixes past tense photographed with present simple context 'It's a relaxing hobby' and omits plural articles for repeated events. Use present simple photograph to match ongoing habit, and plural forms sunrises and sunsets to indicate repeated instances. Also add no article or use plural nouns for general activities.

× Of course I prefer views in a rural areas because rural areas are surrounded by lush granary and the scenery was also the scenery is also breathtaking.

✓ Of course I prefer views in rural areas because rural areas are surrounded by lush greenery and the scenery is also breathtaking.

Use 'rural areas' without the article 'a' because 'areas' is plural. 'Granary' is incorrect for vegetation; 'greenery' is the correct noun. The phrase repeated 'the scenery was also the scenery is also' is redundant and contains tense inconsistency; simplify to 'the scenery is also breathtaking' to match present preference. Suggestion: remove incorrect article before plural nouns, choose correct noun (greenery), and avoid redundant phrasing.

× So I prefer to go there and sit in a silence and taking a pictures by many different angles and many different lights, so it is very good.

✓ So I prefer to go there, sit in silence, and take pictures from many different angles and in different lighting, which is very enjoyable.

Use 'in silence' not 'in a silence'. Use parallel verb forms: 'sit' and 'take' (not 'taking') after 'prefer to'. Use 'take pictures' not 'take a pictures'. Use prepositions 'from many different angles' and 'in different lighting' (or 'under different lighting'). Replace vague 'so it is very good' with 'which is very enjoyable.' Suggestion: maintain parallel structure, correct prepositions, and use uncountable nouns properly.

× Yes, I prefer views in my own country because it has preserved many heritage sites and hill stations.

✓ Yes, I prefer views in my own country because it has preserved many heritage sites and hill stations.

This sentence is grammatically correct in tense and structure. It uses present simple to state a general preference and present perfect/ simple present 'has preserved' correctly to indicate ongoing preservation. No change needed.

× For example, Dasani, Qutub, Minar, Mount Abu and there are many waterfalls are also there so I love taking pictures of them and their scenery is just amazing.

✓ For example, Dasani, Qutub Minar, Mount Abu, and many waterfalls; I love taking pictures of them because their scenery is just amazing.

The original has redundant 'are also there' and poor listing punctuation. 'Qutub, Minar' should be 'Qutub Minar' (one place). Remove duplicate 'are' and restructure into two clauses: list places clearly, then state the reason. Use 'because their scenery is just amazing' for a clear causal relationship. Suggestion: fix proper names, remove redundancy, and connect ideas with correct conjunctions or punctuation.