视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve fluency and accuracy by removing hesitations and grammatical errors, use a clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 supporting details. Use correct tense and articles (e.g., 'I am an international student'), and avoid repetition. Add a linking word when giving an example (e.g., 'for example'). Keep the answer to no more than five sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, when I was studying in New York as an international student, I used to take my phone out every day and photograph the squares, streets, and people walking along the paths. I like capturing everyday scenes because they tell a story about the place.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support with specific reasons and a linking word. Correct collocations (say 'rural areas' plural or 'the countryside') and use natural expressions like 'laid-back lifestyle' instead of 'low key lifestyle.' Keep it concise and avoid short, fragmented sentences.

示例: I prefer rural areas because they have fresher air and a more laid-back lifestyle. For instance, when I visit the countryside I can relax and enjoy quiet walks without the noise and crowds of the city.

建议: Make a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and give specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). Avoid repetitions and fix errors ('other countries', 'I haven't been to before', 'inspire me'). Mention what specifically inspires you (landscape, culture, light).

示例: I prefer views in other countries because unfamiliar landscapes and cultures inspire me. For example, seeing a coastal cliff or a historic city I haven't visited before gives me new ideas for photography and helps me see familiar subjects in a different light.

× I I am the big fan of taking photos.

✓ I am a big fan of taking photos.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before a singular count noun when mentioning it for the first time. 'The' implies a specific or unique fan; 'a big fan' is the correct general expression. Suggestion: Use 'a' with singular countable nouns when speaking generally.

× Actually, when I was in New York and I'm a international student, I like to take my phone out every day and I shoot a lot about the squares and the roads and the people who walks on the path.

✓ Actually, when I was in New York and I was an international student, I liked to take my phone out every day and I shot a lot of photos of the squares, the roads, and the people who walked on the path.

This sentence mixes past and present tenses and has article and subject-verb agreement errors. Use past tense consistently ('was', 'liked', 'shot', 'walked') because the context is a past period. Also use 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound ('international') and plural verb agreement 'people who walked' (people is plural, so 'walked' is correct). Use 'photos of' rather than 'about'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent: if describing past events, use past tense for all verbs; use 'an' before vowel sounds; use 'photos of' for photographing things.

× I shoot a lot about the squares and the roads and the people who walks on the path.

✓ I shot a lot of photos of the squares, the roads, and the people who walked on the path.

The verb 'shoot' (take photos) typically uses the preposition 'of' to indicate the object photographed, not 'about'. Also 'people' requires plural verb 'walked'. Suggestion: Use 'photos of' to describe subjects of photographs and ensure verb agreement with plural nouns.

× Actually, I love the rural area more because that rural area has more fresh air and the low key lifestyle.

✓ Actually, I prefer rural areas because rural areas have fresher air and a low-key lifestyle.

Use plural 'rural areas' for a general preference and 'prefer' is more natural than 'love ... more'. 'Rural area' with 'the' or 'that' is awkward here; use no article for generalizations or make it plural. 'Fresh air' can be 'fresher air' in comparison, and 'a low-key lifestyle' needs the indefinite article and hyphenated adjective 'low-key'. Suggestion: For general statements, use plural nouns without 'the', use comparative 'fresher', and include 'a' before singular countable nouns like 'lifestyle'.

× I want to enjoy the moment.

✓ I want to enjoy the moment.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; however, if referring generally to enjoying moments, 'enjoy the moment' is idiomatic when referring to a specific moment. No change needed. Suggestion: Keep as is or say 'enjoy the moment' when referring to a specific experience.

× I prefer the view in other country or any other area that I I didn't I didn't get there before because the new view or the different landscape can give me can inspires me to.

✓ I prefer the view in another country or any other area that I haven't been to before because new views or different landscapes can inspire me.

Multiple issues: use 'another country' (article 'another' for singular count noun), 'haven't been to' for the correct present perfect form when referring to places not yet visited, remove repeated words, and fix verb form 'inspire' (base form after 'can'). Also use plural 'views' and 'landscapes' to generalize. Remove extra 'can' and end the sentence properly. Suggestion: Use 'another' for singular alternatives, use present perfect 'haven't been to' for experiences up to now, and use 'can' + base verb (inspire). Avoid repetition.

× or any other area that I I didn't I didn't get there before because the new view or the different landscape can give me can inspires me to.

✓ or any other area that I haven't been to before because new views or different landscapes can inspire me.

The original uses incorrect past tense phrasing 'didn't get there' and an incorrect verb form 'inspires' after 'can'. Use present perfect 'haven't been to' to indicate lack of prior experience, and after modal 'can' use the base verb 'inspire'. Suggestion: Replace 'didn't get there before' with 'haven't been to before' and use 'can' + base verb.