视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문법과 문장 구조 오류를 수정해야 합니다. 현재 답변은 동사 형태 오류(예: 'to taking', 'When I traveling', 'take on taking'), 문장 단편화, 그리고 불필요한 반복이 있습니다. 더 자연스럽고 효과적인 답변을 위해 주제를 직접적으로 말하고, 한두 개의 구체적 예시(어디서, 누구와, 어떤 순간에)를 연결어(예: 'when', 'so', 'because')로 이어 서술하세요. 문장은 2~4개로 유지하고 과거·현재 시제 일관성을 지키세요.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel to other countries, I usually take photos with my friends and family to capture memorable moments. For example, last year we photographed a sunset over a mountain, which reminded me of how peaceful the place felt.

建议: 의미 전달은 되지만 표현이 어색하고 단어 선택이 잘못되었습니다(예: 'fuse in', 'more impressed', 'shows more the landscape too comfortable and relaxed'). 비교 설명을 명확히 하고 연결어(예: 'because', 'so', 'for example')를 사용해 이유를 구체적으로 제시하세요. 형용사와 명사 조합을 자연스럽게 정리하고 문장을 2~3개로 유지하세요.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel more peaceful and scenic than cities. For example, I enjoy wide open fields and quiet lakes, which help me relax and notice natural details like birds and flowers.

建议: 의미 전달이 불분명한 어휘 사용('sensory of champions, tempers')와 문법 오류(주어-동사 일치, 복수·단수 혼동)가 있습니다. 구체적인 이유와 예시를 명확히 하고 혼동되는 단어는 대체하세요(예: 'unique architecture', 'different vegetation', 'traditional gardens'). 또한 연결어로 근거를 제시하고 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I often find different architecture and unique landscapes more inspiring than those at home. For example, visiting traditional gardens in Japan or historic streets in Europe gives me new ideas for photography and helps me see familiar things in a new way.

× Yes, I'd like to taking pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I'd like to take pictures of different views.

The verb phrase 'would like' is followed by the base form of the verb (infinitive without to) or 'to' + infinitive. Using the -ing form after 'I'd like' is incorrect. Use 'I'd like to take' or 'I'd like taking' only in different contexts. Suggestion: memorize that 'would like' pairs with 'to' + base verb (I'd like to take).

× When I traveling to different countries.

✓ When I travel to different countries.

The sentence fragment uses the present participle 'traveling' without the auxiliary verb, but this clause should be a simple present tense adverbial clause describing habitual action. Use the base form with appropriate tense: 'I travel' for habitual actions. Also the clause needs to connect to a main clause to be complete. Suggestion: use 'When I travel to different countries, I usually...'.

× I usually take on taking a photo with my friends or families.

✓ I usually take a photo with my friends or family.

The original contains unnecessary 'on' and incorrect 'taking' after 'take'. Use the verb 'take' with the object 'a photo'. Also 'family' as an uncountable or collective noun is more natural than 'families' in this context. Suggestion: 'I usually take a photo with my friends or family.'

× I'd like to fuse in rural area because it is more impressed for me and it shows more the landscape too comfortable and relaxed.

✓ I'd like to stay in rural areas because they impress me more and the landscape feels more comfortable and relaxing.

Multiple issues: 'fuse' is incorrect verb choice; likely intended 'stay' or 'live'. 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area' with article. 'it is more impressed for me' is passive and wrong pronoun/verb; use active 'they impress me more'. 'it shows more the landscape too comfortable and relaxed' has word order and adjective/adverb problems; use 'the landscape feels more comfortable and relaxing'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs (stay), match singular/plural, and use active constructions.

× I prefer views in other countries because their landscapes often inspire me more than those at home.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because their landscapes often inspire me more than those at home.

This sentence is acceptable grammatically; 'their' correctly refers to 'other countries' and 'those' refers to 'views' at home. No correction needed. Suggestion: keep as is.

× For example, the sensory of champions, tempers and their gardens makes me feel more sensitive and imagine.

✓ For example, the scents of jasmine, temples and their gardens make me feel more inspired and imaginative.

Several words are incorrect: 'sensory' is a noun/adjective but not the intended 'scents'; 'champions' likely meant 'jasmine' (a smell) or 'landscapes' — I corrected to 'jasmine' as a plausible scent, 'tempers' is wrong and likely 'temples'. Subject-verb agreement: plural subject needs 'make' not 'makes'. 'Feel more sensitive and imagine' is awkward; 'feel more inspired and imaginative' conveys the intended meaning. Suggestion: choose correct nouns, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use appropriate adjectives.