视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, correct grammar, avoid repetition and unclear words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons or an example using linking words. Correct common mistakes (e.g., 'founded' → 'fond', remove duplicate words). Keep answer under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I love taking photos of beautiful views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and mountain landscapes because they help me remember special trips. I enjoy looking back at these pictures later, and they make me feel relaxed.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and use clear linking words to explain reasons. Reduce hesitations and correct phrases ('I love you and the rural area' → 'I prefer rural areas'). Provide specific contrasts (e.g., pollution, noise, greenery). Keep to two or three sentences.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and greener. For instance, rural places tend to have less pollution and more open fields or forests, which I find peaceful.

建议: Begin with a clear preference sentence and then give specific details and examples. Fix grammar and tenses ('I love you and my country' → 'I prefer views in my own country'; 'I usually went' → 'I usually go' or 'I have gone'). Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Mention particular types of scenery and a brief reason or memory.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I enjoy our mountain and desert landscapes. For example, I often go to the desert to watch sunsets over the dunes, which is a peaceful and memorable experience.

× Yes, I am founded of beautiful view view so that's why I want to save, take picture and save it in my phone so that I can see it later and remember what's the amazing view lock.

✓ Yes, I am fond of beautiful views, so that's why I want to take pictures and save them on my phone so that I can see them later and remember the amazing views.

Errors: 'founded' is incorrect; correct adjective is 'fond' (incorrect use of adjectives). 'view view' is repeated and should be plural 'views' (singular/plural issue). 'take picture and save it' should be 'take pictures and save them' to match plural and use correct pronoun (singular/plural and incorrect pronoun). 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone' (preposition error). 'what's the amazing view lock' is unclear and incorrect; replaced with 'the amazing views'. Suggestion: use the adjective 'fond of', pluralize countable nouns correctly, use 'take pictures' for habitual action, use 'on' with devices, and ensure pronouns match number.

× I love you and the rural area, uh, because there's more natural view there and no, uh, no more human damage the natural in the rural area like what they did in the urban area.

✓ I love the rural areas because there are more natural views there and less human damage to nature than in urban areas.

Errors: 'I love you and the rural area' likely intended 'I love the rural area' (incorrect pronoun 'you' used). 'there's more natural view' should be plural 'there are more natural views' (there be issue and singular/plural). 'no more human damage the natural' is ungrammatical; correct is 'less human damage to nature' (preposition and word choice). 'like what they did in the urban area' becomes comparative 'than in urban areas'. Suggestions: omit mistaken pronoun, use 'there are' with plural noun, use 'less' for uncountable reduction, and use 'to' with 'damage to nature'.

× So it's more natural there. That's what I.

✓ So it's more natural there. That's what I mean.

Error: The fragment 'That's what I.' is incomplete and missing the verb 'mean' to complete the idea (sentence without a verb / sentence structure). Suggestion: add 'mean' to complete the sentence and convey intended meaning.

× I love you and my country.

✓ I love my country.

Error: 'I love you and my country' incorrectly includes 'you' (wrong pronoun) and creates confusion. The intended meaning is 'I love my country.' Suggestion: remove the unintended 'you' pronoun.

× Uh, there's not a lot of, uh, green view or natural view that most people love it, but there's some of nature view that related to the mountains and to the desert, which is something I love it.

✓ There aren't a lot of green or natural views that most people like, but there are some natural scenes related to the mountains and the desert, which I love.

Errors: 'there's not a lot of' should be 'there aren't a lot of' because 'views' is plural (there be issue and singular/plural). 'green view or natural view' should be 'green or natural views' (plural). 'that most people love it' contains redundant pronoun 'it' (incorrect pronoun). 'there's some of nature view' should be 'there are some natural scenes' (there be and word choice). 'that related to the mountains' needs 'related to' -> 'related to the mountains' is okay but adjust to plural noun. Suggestions: use 'there are' with plural nouns, avoid redundant pronouns, use natural collocations like 'natural scenes' or 'natural views'.

× And I usually went to the desert to watch to watch it.

✓ And I usually go to the desert to see it.

Errors: 'usually went' mixes past tense 'went' with habitual adverb 'usually'; use present simple 'usually go' for habitual actions (present tense issue / past tense issue). Repetition 'to watch to watch' is redundant. 'watch it' is improved to 'see it' for natural collocation. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual activities ('I usually go'), avoid repetition, and choose appropriate verbs like 'see'.