视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (umm, uh), and use correct verb forms. Give one specific example with a linking word. For instance, say: “Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I visit natural places I often photograph landscapes because they are peaceful and photogenic.”

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I visit natural places I often photograph landscapes because they are peaceful and photogenic.

建议: Answer directly and clearly with a topic sentence indicating a preference, then give specific reasons using linking words (because, for example). Remove hesitations and correct grammar. Mention one or two specific features you like in rural or urban views.

示例: I usually prefer rural views because I like natural scenery and quiet spots. For example, when I visit my village I photograph the river and nearby farms because they offer tranquil and colourful scenes.

建议: Start with a clear statement and improve grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words to organise details (so, for example, last year). Be specific about places and why you liked them. Avoid fragmented sentences.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I have not travelled abroad yet. For example, I have visited many places in India such as Goa last year, where I photographed beaches and sunsets and made great memories.

× Yes Sir. Umm, I like to taking pictures in various uh, views.

✓ Yes Sir. Umm, I like taking pictures of various views.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the base verb or gerund; use 'like taking' not 'like to taking'. Also use 'of various views' instead of 'in various views' for natural collocation. Grammar Problem Type ID: 8

× Uh, for example, if I visit any natural places, that time I used to click pictures.

✓ Uh, for example, when I visited natural places, I used to take pictures then.

The sentence mixes present tense 'visit' with past habit 'used to'. Align tenses: use past 'visited' with 'used to'. Also 'click pictures' is informal; 'take pictures' is preferred. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× Umm, it, it depends on a uh, place where I, uh, go, where I going, uh, for example, if I visit in my uh, village, so that time I take pictures from natural beauties, for example, River Oregon farm.

✓ Umm, it depends on the place I go to. For example, when I visit my village, I take pictures of the natural scenery, such as the river, orchards, and farms.

Original has redundant fillers and incorrect verb forms ('where I going'). Use correct clause 'the place I go to'. 'Visit in my village' should be 'visit my village'. Use 'take pictures of' and clearer nouns. Split into two sentences for clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× I never visit in other country in my life.

✓ I have never visited another country in my life.

Use present perfect 'have never visited' for life experiences. Omit 'in' before 'other country'; use 'another country'. Also 'visit' should be past participle 'visited'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× So in my country India I visited so many places for example S reasons or north reasons.

✓ So in my country, India, I have visited many places, for example the south regions or the northern regions.

Use present perfect 'have visited' for life experiences. Add commas with apposition 'India'. Use 'many' not 'so many' for concise formal speech. 'S reasons' unclear—probably 'south regions' and 'north regions'; include definite article 'the'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 22

× So last vacation I visit Goa with my family.

✓ So on my last vacation I visited Goa with my family.

Use past tense 'visited' for a completed action in the past. Add preposition 'on' for 'on my last vacation'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× That time I clicked. I create so many memories.

✓ At that time I took many pictures and created so many memories.

Use past tense verbs 'took' and 'created' to describe past events. 'Clicked' is informal; 'took pictures' is more natural. Combine into a single coherent sentence. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5