视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and add one specific detail using a linking word. Also correct small grammar issues: say “I love taking photographs” and “when I go for a walk in the early morning.”

示例: Yes, I love taking photographs of different views. For example, when I go for a walk in the early morning I often photograph misty fields and colorful sunrises because they capture the quiet beauty of nature.

建议: Give a clear opinion first, then one or two specific reasons linked logically. Use correct phrasing: “I prefer urban views” and avoid awkward phrases like “keep into my memory.” Say “preserve in my photo collection” or “remember them.”

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architecture and tall buildings. For instance, I like photographing modern bridges and skyscrapers, which I later keep in my photo collection to remember the city’s design.

建议: State your preference clearly, avoid repetition, and give specific reasons with linking words. Improve grammar: say “I prefer to see views in my own country” and replace “saves my money” with “is cheaper.” Explain how it connects to culture concisely.

示例: I prefer seeing views in my own country because it is cheaper and I can visit culturally important places easily. For example, I can photograph historic temples and city landmarks while also taking part in local festivals, which makes the trips more meaningful.

× Yeah, I love to take the photographs of the different views whenever I go out for walking in the early morning as it shows the beauty of the nature.

✓ Yeah, I love taking photographs of different views whenever I go out for a walk in the early morning because they show the beauty of nature.

Use of 'love to take the photographs' is acceptable but 'love taking photographs' is more natural: this is a verb + -ing preference (ID 8). 'Go out for walking' is incorrect collocation; use 'go out for a walk'. 'the different views' and 'the nature' misuse articles — 'different views' and 'nature' without 'the' are correct. 'as it shows' is singular; referring to 'photographs' or 'views' requires plural 'they show'. Replace 'as' with 'because' for clarity. Suggestion: use gerund after 'love', correct collocations, match plural references and remove unnecessary articles.

× I prefer viewing the urban views as it has a lot of good infrastructure and the big buildings.

✓ I prefer urban views because they have a lot of good infrastructure and big buildings.

The original uses 'it has' while the subject is 'urban views' (plural). This is a subject-verb agreement error (ID 27). Also 'viewing the urban views' is wordy; 'prefer urban views' is concise. 'the big buildings' does not need 'the'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subject and simplify phrase structure.

× I love to take the photographs for that views and keep into my memory.

✓ I love to take photographs of those views and keep them in my memory.

'Photographs for that views' misuses preposition and demonstrative; correct is 'photographs of those views' (ID 11). 'Keep into my memory' is incorrect preposition; use 'keep them in my memory' or 'keep them as memories'. Also include the object 'them' to refer to photographs. Suggestion: use 'of' for what is photographed, 'in my memory' for storage, and match demonstrative and plurality.

× I prefer to view in my own country because there are lots of big buildings and the infrastructure is very good.

✓ I prefer to view places in my own country because there are lots of big buildings and the infrastructure is very good.

The phrase 'prefer to view in my own country' is vague and misses an object; add 'places' or 'views' (ID 11). Otherwise sentence is acceptable. Suggestion: include the object of 'view' to make the sentence grammatical and clear.

× So viewing in my own country saves my money also and also helps me into getting in touch with my cultural, religious activities.

✓ So viewing in my own country also saves me money and helps me stay in touch with my cultural and religious activities.

This sentence has awkward word order and unnecessary repetition 'also and also' and incorrect preposition 'helps me into getting in touch' (ID 26). 'Saves my money' should be 'saves me money'. 'Getting in touch with my cultural, religious activities' is unidiomatic; use 'stay in touch with my cultural and religious activities' or better 'keep me connected to my cultural and religious activities'. Suggestion: remove repetition, correct verb-object order, and use natural collocations like 'saves me money' and 'stay in touch'.