视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar; use a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh), fix verb forms and article use, and give one specific supporting detail. Link ideas with a brief connector.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography is my passion. For example, I often use my phone to capture sunsets and city skylines, which helps me relax and reflect after a busy day.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence stating preference, correct vocabulary and grammar (avoid mispronounced/mistyped words like 'abuse'), remove repetition, and provide a clear reason with one specific example using a linking word (for example or because).

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the energy and architectural variety there. For example, I like photographing busy streets and modern buildings since they offer interesting angles and are easy to access.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. Use correct collocations (e.g., 'rich in culture and heritage', 'beautiful scenery') and give one specific supporting detail or example. Use a linking word like 'because' or 'for example'.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because it is rich in culture and heritage. For example, I enjoy photographing traditional festivals and historic landscapes that reflect our local customs.

× I really like taking picture of different views because it is my passion.

✓ I really like taking pictures of different views because it is my passion.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because 'taking' implies photographing multiple views. Use plural when referring to more than one item or when speaking generally about the activity. Improve by matching count to context (take pictures).

× Also I love to uh catch different types of views in my mobile because it make me feel more peace and comforting for my inner inner voice also.

✓ Also I love to capture different types of views on my mobile because it makes me feel more peaceful and comforted inside.

Several errors: 'catch' is not the right verb for photographing; 'capture' is appropriate. Use preposition 'on' for something stored on a device. 'make' must be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it' (subject-verb agreement, treated here as third person singular). 'more peace' should be adjective/adverb: 'more peaceful' or 'feel more peace' but 'feel more peaceful' is natural. 'comforting for my inner inner voice' is awkward and redundant; 'comforted inside' or 'comforting to my inner voice' is clearer. Remove duplicated 'inner'.

× Also I love to uh catch different types of views in my mobile because it make me feel more peace and comforting for my inner inner voice also.

✓ Also I love to capture different types of views on my mobile because it makes me feel more peaceful and comforted inside.

The verb 'make' needs to be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it' (third person singular). Ensure subject-verb agreement by adding -s in present simple for he/she/it. (This also overlaps with verb choice and adjective use addressed elsewhere.)

× I will I prefer abuse in urban areas because I really like to watch view of urban areas because it because it is more comforting and to to catch easier view.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I really like to see urban scenery; it is more comforting and it is easier to capture good views.

'Watch view' is incorrect: use 'see' or 'view' and plural 'views' to refer generally. Several repetitions and word choice errors: 'abuse' is likely a mis-saying and removed. 'easier to capture good views' uses plural and clearer phrasing. Match singular/plural and choose appropriate verbs for the activity.

× I will I prefer abuse in urban areas because I really like to watch view of urban areas because it because it is more comforting and to to catch easier view.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I really like to see urban scenery; it is more comforting and it is easier to capture good views.

Original sentence has extra filler 'I will I' and unclear word 'abuse', repeated 'because it', and duplicated 'to'. Restructure the sentence for clarity: remove fillers, correct vocabulary, and split into logical clauses. Ensure parallel structure ('it is more comforting and it is easier...').

× It was my most comforting journey for.

✓ It has been my most comforting experience.

'Was my most comforting journey for' is awkward and likely wrong tense/form. If talking generally or recently, 'has been' fits; replace 'journey' with 'experience' unless specifically discussing a trip. Remove trailing preposition 'for'. Use appropriate tense and noun choice to match intended meaning.

× I really prefer views in my country because absolutely my country is rich in cultural and heritage and the beautiful sceneries are seen in my country and I so I definitely view in my own country.

✓ I really prefer views in my country because my country is rich in culture and heritage, the beautiful scenery is visible there, and I definitely prefer to view it in my own country.

Problems: 'rich in cultural and heritage' should be 'rich in culture and heritage'. 'Sceneries are seen in my country' is awkward; use 'the beautiful scenery is visible there' or 'there are many beautiful sceneries.' 'I so I definitely view' is ungrammatical—replace with 'I definitely prefer to view it in my own country.' Fix prepositions and word order for natural English.

× I really prefer views in my country because absolutely my country is rich in cultural and heritage and the beautiful sceneries are seen in my country and I so I definitely view in my own country.

✓ I really prefer views in my country because my country is rich in culture and heritage, and the beautiful scenery can be seen there, so I definitely prefer to view it in my own country.

'adjectives/adverbs': 'absolutely' is unnecessary and awkward in this position. 'cultural' is an adjective that needs a noun (culture) in this context. Use 'scenery' (uncountable) rather than 'sceneries' often. Improve word choice and sentence rhythm for clarity.