视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct word choice; organize into a clear topic sentence with one or two specific supporting details. Remove filler words (uh) and correct phrases like "difference view" to "different views" or "varied views." Aim for 2–3 sentences, using linking words if you add details (for example, "because" or "especially").

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially in forests where the abundant green foliage creates a calming atmosphere. For example, I often photograph sunlight filtering through the trees because it produces refreshing and peaceful images.

建议: Combine ideas into coherent sentences and avoid repetition. Provide one clear reason and one specific example, connected with linking words (for example, "because" and "for instance"). Watch for accuracy in claims (urban areas often have more pollution) — say "where I live" to qualify personal preference.

示例: I prefer urban views because, where I live, good public transport reduces traffic and the air and skies are relatively clear. For instance, city parks and riverside walks offer pleasant scenery and fewer noisy streets, so I enjoy photographing those places.

建议: Finish your response and avoid trailing off. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two concise reasons linked logically (for example, "because" and "also"). Remove filler sounds (uh) and avoid repetitive wording like "I know the culture and tradition of my country." Be specific about what aspects make you comfortable (food, language, customs).

示例: I prefer views in my own country because they make me feel at home and I understand the language and customs, which reduces anxiety. Also, I appreciate familiar landscapes and local traditions, so sightseeing at home feels more comfortable and meaningful.

× I like to take pictures of the difference view, especially in the forest that is uh, rich in green colors and I like the nature because of its calming effect and refreshing views and especially.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views, especially in forests that are rich in green colors. I like nature because of its calming effect and refreshing scenes.

The student used 'difference view' which is incorrect adjective form; 'different' should modify 'views' (plural). 'The forest' followed by 'is uh, rich in green colors' is wordy and slightly ungrammatical; use plural 'forests that are rich in green colors' for general preference. 'I like the nature' is incorrect article use with an uncountable noun; use 'I like nature'. Also the original had run-on structure; split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'different' as adjective, match singular/plural appropriately, avoid unnecessary articles with uncountable nouns and break long sentences into simpler ones.

× I prefer views in urban areas because the air tends to be cleaner and skies are clearer where I live.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because the air tends to be cleaner and the skies are clearer where I live.

The sentence omitted the article 'the' before 'skies', which is needed when referring to a specific set of skies in that location. This is a subject–noun/article agreement issue affecting clarity. Suggestion: include 'the' before 'skies' to parallel 'the air' and improve coherence.

× Less traffic due to good public transport.

✓ There is less traffic due to good public transport.

This fragment lacks a finite verb and subject; it's a sentence without a verb. According to the list, this is a sentence structure error. Add 'There is' to form a complete sentence that states the situation. Suggestion: ensure each statement has a subject and verb, e.g., 'There is less traffic...'.

× For example, the city parks and Riverside walks give pleasant views without without the noise and congestion.

✓ For example, the city parks and riverside walks give pleasant views without the noise and congestion.

The sentence contains a duplicated word 'without without' (typing/repetition error) and 'Riverside' should be lowercase 'riverside' unless it's a proper name. This is a sentence structure/word choice error. Remove the duplicated word and lowercase common nouns. Suggestion: proofread to remove duplicates and use correct capitalization for common nouns.

× I'd like the view of my own country, uh, which makes me feel at home and I'm familiar with the locations so that I don't have anxiety in going there because I know the culture and tradition of my country, but I also.

✓ I'd like the views in my own country, which make me feel at home. I'm familiar with the locations, so I don't feel anxious going there because I know the culture and traditions of my country, but I also like visiting other countries.

The original has several issues: 'the view of my own country' is awkward—use 'the views in my own country' for general preference. 'Which makes me feel' disagrees in number with 'views' (plural), so change to 'which make me feel'. 'I don't have anxiety in going there' is unnatural; use 'I don't feel anxious going there'. 'Culture and tradition' should be plural 'traditions' for general reference. The sentence also ends abruptly 'but I also.' Complete the thought by adding a contrasting clause. Suggestions: ensure pronouns and relative clauses agree in number, use natural collocations like 'feel anxious', pluralize when speaking generally, and finish contrastive statements.