视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. When I encounter a breathtaking view, I like to take photos because they help me preserve the memory and share it with friends.

建议: Answer directly and clearly. Begin with a topic sentence stating your preference (or neutrality), then give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid vague phrases and filler words and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'natural scenery' not 'great nature'; 'urban' vs 'rural'). Keep it to 2 sentences.

示例: I prefer natural scenery whether it is urban parks or rural landscapes because what matters to me is an interesting subject to photograph. For example, city rooftops offer striking skylines, while rural fields provide peaceful, wide-open views.

建议: Be specific and fluent. Start with a clear statement of preference, give one or two precise reasons, and avoid fillers and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and correct tense and phrasing.

示例: I prefer views in other countries, especially Turkey, because it has diverse landscapes such as Cappadocia's rock formations and coastal scenery that are visually stunning and very photogenic.

× Yes, of course. Specially when I see a great view, it's kind of breathtaking.

✓ Yes, of course. Especially when I see a great view, it's kind of breathtaking.

The speaker used 'Specially' but the correct adverb for this meaning is 'Especially'. 'Specially' is used for 'for a special purpose' while 'especially' emphasizes particular cases. Use 'especially' to highlight something notable.

× So it's very beneficial for me to take a lot of photos because it's a great memory for me.

✓ So it is very beneficial for me to take a lot of photos because they make great memories for me.

The original mixes singular 'it' with plural 'photos' and then calls 'it' a memory. This is a sentence structure and agreement issue. Replace 'it's' with 'they make' to refer to 'photos' and ensure subject-pronoun agreement and clear meaning.

× It doesn't matter for my perspective, the most important thing is to be a great nature, which is allow me to take a lot of photos in front of it.

✓ It doesn't matter from my perspective; the most important thing is great nature, which allows me to take a lot of photos in front of it.

Use 'from my perspective' not 'for my perspective'. 'To be a great nature' is wrong; use 'great nature' as a noun phrase. 'Which is allow' is incorrect verb form and subject-verb agreement; use 'which allows'. This fixes preposition, noun phrase, and verb agreement errors.

× Weather in rural or, or, uh, airplane areas.

✓ Whether in rural or urban areas.

The speaker likely intended 'whether' (introducing alternatives) and 'urban' not 'airplane'. 'Airplane areas' is incorrect vocabulary. Correct to 'Whether in rural or urban areas' to express the contrast.

× Well, to be honest, I prefer going to Turkey, which is, has, uh, an amazing, uh, view uh, overall it has a lot of, uh, landscapes.

✓ Well, to be honest, I prefer going to Turkey, which has amazing scenery; overall it has a lot of different landscapes.

Remove redundant commas and filler words. 'Which is, has' is ungrammatical; use 'which has'. 'An amazing view' is awkward when speaking generally; 'amazing scenery' or 'varied landscapes' is better. This corrects pronoun clause and noun choice.

× It's uh, breathtaking and I like them soon.

✓ It's breathtaking and I like it a lot.

The original mixes singular 'it' with plural 'them' and uses 'soon' incorrectly. Use consistent pronoun 'it' referring to 'scenery' and replace 'soon' with 'a lot' or similar adverb of degree. This fixes pronoun agreement and word choice.