视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant and natural, but can be more concise and use better vocabulary and sentence structure. Reduce redundancy (‘take pictures’ repeated) and correct collocations (say ‘green scenery’ or ‘green landscapes’). Add a linking phrase to explain why you enjoy it and one specific detail or example.

示例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing countryside landscapes after a busy week because the peaceful forests and green fields help me relax. For example, last Sunday I spent an hour photographing dew on ferns in a small woodland near my village.

建议: This answer has clarity and grammar problems and unclear phrases (e.g. ‘gantry side’, ‘release my strength’, ‘so I spoke’). Use a clear topic sentence stating preference, then one or two supporting reasons with correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid fillers and incorrect words.

示例: I prefer rural views to urban ones because forests and open fields make me feel calm. For instance, walking through grassy meadows restores my energy after a stressful week, and I often stop to photograph wildflowers and trees.

建议: The meaning is understandable but grammar and word choice are weak (use ‘I prefer’, not ‘I'm preferred’; ‘it involves my memory’ unclear; ‘novelity’ is incorrect). Start with a clear preference, give specific reasons and contrast with a supporting example about foreign scenery. Use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘although’.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because they feel familiar and often remind me of family trips and childhood memories. However, I also enjoy scenery abroad because new landscapes and architectural styles inspire me—for example, I loved the coastal cliffs I photographed on a trip to [country].

× I enjoy taking pictures in the countryside, especially after the busy week.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures in the countryside, especially after a busy week.

The phrase 'the busy week' implies a specific week already mentioned; here the speaker means any typical busy week, so the indefinite article 'a' is appropriate. This is an article error (use of definite vs indefinite) and affects noun phrase meaning. Suggestion: use 'a busy week' when speaking generally.

× I love to take pictures of the forest and the greenery scene.

✓ I love taking pictures of the forest and the greenery.

'The greenery scene' is awkward and unidiomatic. Use the noun 'greenery' alone to refer to plants and green areas. Also prefer the gerund 'taking' for parallelism with 'enjoy taking' earlier. Suggestion: use 'the greenery' or 'green scenery'.

× I would say I'm referred the gantry side.

✓ I would say I prefer the countryside.

'I'm referred' is incorrect passive/voice and 'the gantry side' appears to be a wrong word choice. The intended meaning is preference, so use the active verb 'prefer'. Replace 'gantry side' with 'countryside' which fits context. Suggestion: say 'I prefer the countryside.'

× The forest, uh, walking uh, over the green grasses made me feel calm and release my strength, so I spoke.

✓ Walking through the forest and over the green grass makes me feel calm and releases my stress, so I said so.

Original sentence has mixed tenses and confusing structure. Use a clear gerund phrase 'Walking through the forest' as subject and maintain present tense 'makes' to match general preference. 'Green grasses' is better as 'green grass' and 'release my strength' is unnatural; 'release my stress' or 'renew my energy' are appropriate. 'So I spoke' should be 'so I said so' or simply omitted. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and natural collocations.

× I prefer the gantry side.

✓ I prefer the countryside.

'Gantry side' is not a correct phrase for contrasting urban and rural areas; it seems to be a wrong word choice. Use 'countryside' or 'rural areas' to express preference. Suggestion: use clear, standard vocabulary like 'countryside.'

× I'm preferred views in my own country because they are familiar and it involves my memory with my family.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because they are familiar and they involve memories of my family.

'I'm preferred' incorrectly uses passive/contracted form; the correct active present tense is 'I prefer.' 'It involves my memory with my family' has pronoun-number mismatch and incorrect collocation. Use plural 'they' to refer to 'views' and 'involve memories of my family.' Suggestion: use 'I prefer' and match plural pronouns and natural phrases like 'involve memories of my family.'

× Look, I also enjoy sceneries in other countries because all their novelity for example.

✓ I also enjoy scenery in other countries because everything there is novel, for example.

'Sceneries' is usually uncountable; use 'scenery.' 'All their novelity' is ungrammatical—'novelty' is the correct noun but the phrase should be 'everything there is novel' or 'because of their novelty.' Also 'for example' should be placed appropriately and connected to an example. Suggestion: use 'I also enjoy scenery in other countries because of its novelty.'