视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (umm), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention why you like scenic views and give an example of a favourite scene to make the answer vivid.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially scenic ones. For example, I love photographing mountain sunsets because the colours and patterns in the sky create memorable scenes, and I keep the photos as reminders of my travels.

建议: Clarify your preference and avoid contradictions. Begin with a clear statement (urban or rural), then give logical reasons and a specific example. Use linking words (because, so, for example) and avoid repeated phrases.

示例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural landscapes and peaceful surroundings. For example, I like photographing fields and rivers when I visit the countryside because they offer interesting textures and colours that city buildings lack.

建议: Be specific and concise. State your preference clearly, give a reason, and add a concrete example or short personal detail. Avoid repetition and colloquial phrases like 'scrolling insta' unless framed properly.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new landscapes and cultures. For instance, I recently looked at photos of coastal villages in Portugal and would love to visit and photograph their colourful houses and seascapes in person.

× Umm yes I do but depends what kind of view is it, if it's a scenic beauty view.

✓ Umm yes I do, but it depends on what kind of view it is, for example if it's a scenic view.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing preposition. 'Depends what kind of view is it' is an indirect question structure and should be 'it depends on what kind of view it is.' Also 'scenic beauty view' is redundant; use 'scenic view.' Suggestion: use 'it depends on' + clause and place the verb after the subject in the clause. Use: 'it depends on what kind of view it is.'

× So I really prefer you taking some good pictures because I like to keep memories of beautiful things and I am a nature person.

✓ So I really prefer taking good pictures because I like to keep memories of beautiful things and I am a nature person.

The use of 'you taking' incorrectly addresses the listener; context requires the speaker's preference for their own action, so use the gerund 'taking' without the pronoun. Also 'prefer taking' is clearer. Suggestion: remove unnecessary pronoun and keep parallel structure: 'I prefer taking...'.

× I love nature and other views such as umm.

✓ I love nature and other types of views, such as landscapes or cityscapes.

Original ends abruptly and is vague. Adding specific examples completes the sentence and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: provide concrete examples after 'such as' to avoid trailing off.

× I prefer views in urban areas because I don't really like the city areas because of the back buildings, they do not attract me.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I don't really like the city areas; the buildings do not attract me.

The sentence contradicts itself by saying 'prefer views in urban areas' then criticizing city buildings. The probable meaning is preference for rural areas. Also 'back buildings' is unclear; 'the buildings' is appropriate. Suggestion: ensure consistency and use clearer nouns.

× I'm more of a nature person as I mentioned before and nature is more seen in urban rural areas so that's why I like taking pictures of rural areas.

✓ I'm more of a nature person, as I mentioned before, and nature is seen more in rural areas, so that's why I like taking pictures of rural areas.

Original 'urban rural areas' is contradictory; choose one. Word order 'seen more in rural areas' is more natural. Add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: remove conflicting words and place adverb 'more' after 'seen.'

× I prefer views in other countries because I have already seen almost every beauty and view in my own country and I really like travelling so I think I would like to see something new and therefore I would really love and I really enjoy scrolling insta and other country views.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I have already seen many beautiful places in my own country, and I really like travelling, so I would like to see something new; I also enjoy scrolling Instagram to look at views from other countries.

The original sentence is long, repetitive and ungrammatical: 'almost every beauty and view' is awkward; use 'many beautiful places.' 'Therefore I would really love and I really enjoy' is redundant. 'Insta' is informal; use 'Instagram.' Break into clearer clauses and use appropriate connectors. Suggestion: simplify, remove repetition, and use standard nouns and punctuation.