视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more grammatical, concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "I don't like taking photos of different views") and explain why with one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because" or "so"). Avoid redundancy and keep your answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

示例: I don't usually like taking photos of views because I prefer to enjoy the moment in person. For example, when I'm traveling I focus on the experience rather than taking pictures, so I rarely look back at photos later.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and explain reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Say "I prefer urban areas because..." Then provide specific, concise details about allergies and how they affect you. Replace vague phrases like "allergy reflection" with "allergic reactions." Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because I often have allergic reactions in natural environments. For example, insects and pollen trigger my allergies, so I feel more comfortable and relaxed in the city.

建议: Begin with a clear topic sentence: "I prefer views in other countries." Then give a specific reason and a short example. Fix grammar (e.g., "when I'm in a new environment") and tense ("I spend" instead of "I spent"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" and "so."

示例: I prefer views in other countries because new environments make me feel excited and curious. For example, I often travel abroad to explore different cultures and landscapes, which helps me learn and relax.

× Actually I don't like taking photos in of different views because after taking photos it's really for me to look it back.

✓ Actually I don't like taking photos of different views because after taking photos it's really hard for me to look back at them.

The phrase 'in of' is incorrect preposition use; choose 'of' for 'photos of views'. 'it's really for me to look it back' has multiple issues: missing adjective 'hard', wrong object pronoun 'it' should be 'them' (plural photos), and the phrasal verb order should be 'look back at them'. Suggestion: use 'hard for me to look back at them' to be grammatically correct and natural.

× So that's why I think I would rather enjoy the moment.

✓ So that's why I think I would rather enjoy the moment.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct. The pronoun use and structure are appropriate.

× I prefer urban area 'cause I so easy to get allergy in the natural environment.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I am so prone to allergies in natural environments.

Use plural 'areas' to match general preference (quantifier/singular-plural issue). 'cause' should be 'because' in formal speech. 'so easy to get allergy' is ungrammatical: use 'so prone to allergies' or 'I get allergies easily'. Also 'in the natural environment' is better as 'in natural environments' to generalize.

× For example, every insect that I meet would make me get the allergy reflection.

✓ For example, any insect I encounter causes an allergic reaction in me.

Several errors: 'every insect that I meet' is awkward; use 'any insect I encounter'. 'would make me get the allergy reflection' is incorrect vocabulary and structure: use 'causes an allergic reaction' or 'triggers my allergies'. Also pronoun placement 'in me' clarifies who is affected.

× So yeah.

✓ So yeah.

This interjection is acceptable as is; no tense correction needed.

× Umm I prefer views in other countries cause I'm the kind of person who would feel excited when I in a new environment, so I spent a lot of time out travelling in different countries to.

✓ Umm, I prefer views in other countries because I'm the kind of person who feels excited when I'm in a new environment, so I spend a lot of time travelling in different countries.

Multiple tense and auxiliary issues: 'cause' -> 'because'. 'would feel excited' is unnecessary conditional; use simple present 'feel' to state habitual tendency. Missing verb 'am' in 'when I in a new environment' — add 'I'm'. 'so I spent a lot of time out travelling' wrongly uses past tense 'spent' and awkward 'out'; use present simple 'I spend a lot of time travelling'. Remove trailing 'to'.