视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence saying whether you enjoy taking pictures, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and unrelated remarks. Focus on clear vocabulary (e.g., ‘traditions’, ‘atmosphere’, ‘memories’) and simple sentence structures.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they capture the local traditions and atmosphere. For example, photos of markets and festivals help me remember the colours and activities of a place, so I can share these memories with my family.

建议: Answer directly and support with clear, specific reasons using linking words like ‘because’ and ‘for example’. Avoid vague or contradictory phrases. Use correct grammar for countable/uncountable nouns (e.g., ‘urban areas’ or ‘the city’) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architecture and lively street scenes. For example, tall buildings and busy cafes create interesting subjects for photos and often change my mood for the better.

建议: Give a clear preference and one brief reason. Use simple, accurate vocabulary to describe landscapes (e.g., ‘deserts’, ‘coastlines’, ‘mountains’) and avoid single-word answers or unclear fragments. Connect ideas with words like ‘because’ or ‘however’.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I am familiar with its deserts and landscapes, and these places have personal meaning to me. However, I also enjoy views from other countries for their different scenery and cultures.

× Yes, I like to take photos in different, different views because it's like make a traditions and countries feel feel high pressure and better.

✓ Yes, I like to take photos of different views because it helps capture traditions and makes countries feel more impressive and lively.

Original sentence has unclear pronoun reference and incorrect verb structure: 'it's like make' is ungrammatical and 'a traditions' mixes singular article with plural noun. Also 'feel feel high pressure and better' repeats words and uses incorrect collocations. Correct by using 'it helps capture' and 'makes countries feel more impressive and lively' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: simplify ideas, use singular/plural consistently and use verbs like 'help' and 'make' with clear objects.

× So good. I am actually I know how to talk about what I know and the facial is my cousin.

✓ That's all. I can talk about what I know, and the person in the photo is my cousin.

Sentence fragments 'So good.' and 'I am actually I know' are awkward; 'facial' is not the correct noun for a person in a photo. Replace fragments with a closing phrase 'That's all', use a single coherent clause 'I can talk about what I know', and use 'the person in the photo' or 'the person pictured' instead of 'the facial'. Suggestion: avoid repeating subjects and use correct nouns for people.

× I prefer an urban areas.

✓ I prefer urban areas.

The article 'an' is singular and cannot be used with the plural noun 'areas'. Remove the article or change to 'an urban area' for a singular form. Suggestion: match articles with noun number: 'an' + singular, or no article with plurals.

× Why? Because it's like an it's like an indoor open place.

✓ Because it's like an indoor open space.

The phrase repeats 'it's like an' and uses 'place' awkwardly. 'Indoor open place' is unnatural; 'indoor open space' is clearer. Remove repetition and choose natural collocations: 'open space' instead of 'open place'.

× It's give you it's helpful.

✓ It gives you help; it's helpful.

'It's give' uses base verb 'give' after 'it' instead of the correct third-person singular form 'gives'. Split into two related expressions 'It gives you help' (better: 'It helps you') or simply 'It's helpful.' Suggestion: use correct verb conjugation for third-person singular.

× Make your life change your day by like and and view.

✓ It can change your day and your life through views.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical, with repeated 'and' and unclear structure. Rephrase to a clear subject-verb-object structure: 'It can change your day and your life through views.' Suggestion: form complete sentences with a clear subject and verb.

× You know, like how Yeah, people, people feelings like change only with a smile.

✓ You know how people's feelings can change with just a smile.

Problems: repeated words ('people, people'), incorrect noun form 'feelings like change', and extra discourse markers ('Yeah'). Use possessive 'people's' and modal 'can' to indicate possibility: 'people's feelings can change with just a smile.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and use possessives for relationships.

× My country only sounds sound.

✓ My country is mostly desert.

'Only sounds sound' is unintelligible and likely a lexical error. Based on later 'Desert. Desert.', the speaker means the country is mainly desert. Use 'is mostly desert' for clear description. Suggestion: choose correct adjectives and nouns to describe landscape.

× Desert. Desert. Every country. Uh, Greenland.

✓ It's a desert country. I would like to visit other countries, for example Greenland.

Fragmented single-word utterances lack grammatical structure. Rephrase into complete sentences: 'It's a desert country' describes homeland; 'I would like to visit other countries, for example Greenland' responds to preference for views in other countries. Suggestion: combine fragments into coherent sentences and indicate contrast ('I would like to visit...').