视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer more directly and clearly with a topic sentence, and then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'pictures', 'views', 'architecture') and avoid repetition. Keep responses under five sentences and use a linking word to connect your reason.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I like photographing the architecture in my city because the buildings have interesting designs and details. Also, I often capture landscapes in rural areas to show how natural and peaceful they are.

建议: State your preference clearly in one sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'for example' to make the answer coherent. Avoid unclear words and incorrect forms; use nouns and adjectives correctly (e.g., 'architecture', 'visually appealing').

示例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy modern architecture and city life. For example, I have an album of photos of local skyscrapers and historic buildings that show interesting shapes and decorations.

建议: Give a clear preference and explain why with one specific detail. Avoid repetition of phrases like 'this is my country' and irrelevant words. Use linking words ('however', 'also') if comparing home and abroad. Keep it concise and grammatically correct.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because I feel connected to its landscapes and architecture. For example, the village near my hometown has traditional houses and a peaceful atmosphere that I often photograph, although I also enjoy visiting other countries to see different architectural styles.

× Do you like do you like taking pictures of different views?

✓ Do you like taking pictures of different views?

The sentence repeats the phrase 'Do you like' which creates redundancy and a fragmented structure. Remove the repeated clause to form a single clear question.

× Yeah, I like the Pixar.

✓ Yes, I like the pictures.

'Pixar' is a proper noun referring to a company and is not appropriate here; likely the speaker meant 'pictures'. Use 'pictures' as a plural noun and 'Yes' instead of informal 'Yeah' for clarity.

× This is a different view is a different America currently from currently Bangladesh is a digital in Bangladesh architects and develop then then building is a beautiful is a.

✓ The views in America are different from those in Bangladesh; Bangladesh is developing, and architects are building many beautiful buildings.

The original is fragmented and contains repeated and misplaced phrases. Reorganize into complete sentences: compare views, state development, and describe architects and buildings. Use plural nouns and verbs to match subjects and ensure logical sequence.

× Basically, I like it iPhone and I have I have a album is in is a building is a architect is in proof This is like I like it.

✓ Basically, I like taking photos with my iPhone, and I have an album of building photos; the architecture looks beautiful and I like it.

The original mixes unrelated words and repeats phrases. Clarify the intended meaning: using an iPhone, having an album, and appreciating architecture. Use articles ('an album'), proper verb forms, and coherent clauses.

× Albon is Alvin is a building is a visually is a beautiful and easy.

✓ My album shows buildings that are visually beautiful and simple.

Many words are incorrect or repeated. 'Albon' and 'Alvin' seem to be misspellings of 'album'; 'visually beautiful' is an appropriate adjective phrase. Replace incorrect words and form a grammatical noun phrase.

× Basically, obviously I I I like it.

✓ Basically, I obviously like it.

Reduce repeated words ('I I I') to a single pronoun and combine adverbs 'basically' and 'obviously' in a single coherent clause.

× This is my country is beautiful village.

✓ My country has beautiful villages.

The original mixes clauses incorrectly. Use plural 'villages' to generalize and rephrase into a correct subject-verb structure.

× This is your name is Sunaga then and my this is my country.

✓ One village is called Sunaga; this is my country.

The original is confusing and repeats 'this is'. Separate into two clear sentences: name of the village and ownership (my country). Use correct punctuation and word order.

× I have a big building.

✓ I have a big building. (or) There is a big building where I live.

The sentence is grammatical but may need clarification whether the speaker owns the building. Ensure article 'a' with singular noun is correct or rephrase to 'There is' if describing location.

× Architects is in food.

✓ Architects are well regarded here. (or) There is a focus on architecture here.

'Architects is in food' is nonsensical and grammatically incorrect: subject-verb agreement ('architects are') and choice of words. Replace with a meaningful, grammatically correct clause about architects.

× This is my country I like it.

✓ This is my country, and I like it.

Two independent clauses need a conjunction or punctuation. Add 'and' or a semicolon to join them correctly.