视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 句子不够自然，表达有语法和用词错误，信息重复。建议：1) 用更自然的句型直接回答并给出原因（主题句+1-2个支持句）；2) 修正语法（例如 use “capture” 而不是 “catch the moments”，用“refresh my mind”或“bring back memories”）；3) 避免冗余，保持在3-4句内。示例结构：直接回答 + 原因 + 具体例子。

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me capture special moments and refresh my mind. For example, when I take landscape photos on weekends, I often look back at them to remember how peaceful the place felt.

建议: 表达不够连贯，有语法和词序错误，结尾不完整。建议：1) 用连接词衔接对比（e.g. "on the one hand... on the other hand"）；2) 修正词组（"less and peace atmosphere" 应为 "a quieter, peaceful atmosphere"）；3) 给一两个具体理由或例子，使内容更具体。保持在3句内。

示例: I prefer both, depending on my mood. On the one hand, urban views are exciting and energise me because of the busy streets and lights. On the other hand, rural scenes are calming and refreshing, especially when I go hiking in quiet countryside.

建议: 句子结构混乱且含义不够清晰。建议：1) 明确比较两者并用连词（e.g. "while" 或 "but"）；2) 用具体原因支持观点（如“familiar culture”或“new experiences”）；3) 避免模糊词组（如 "more or less"），保持句子简洁。

示例: I like views in both my own country and abroad. Views at home feel familiar and comforting because of the culture and memories, while views in other countries are exciting and offer new experiences and perspectives.

× Absolutely, I like taking photos of different views as I can catch the moments which is special and this way can make me refresh myself and very remember.

✓ Absolutely, I like taking photos of different views because I can capture moments that are special; this also refreshes my mind and makes them easier to remember.

错误类型：动词的现在分词或非谓语形式与句子结构不匹配，并且句子中有代词和短语使用不当。说明：句中“catch the moments which is special”中的which指代不清且动词单复数不一致，应改为“that are special”；“this way can make me refresh myself and very remember”结构不自然且“refresh myself”和“remember”需要调整为正确的谓语形式，改为“this also refreshes my mind and makes them easier to remember”。建议：使用连接词because替换不自然的as，使用capture更符合“拍照捕捉瞬间”，注意从句中主谓一致并使用自然的词组表达（refresh my mind, make something easier to remember）。

× Both of them. Sometimes I like to enjoy the busy city, it can make me more engaged in my life. In other times I like the less and peace atmosphere which.

✓ Both. Sometimes I enjoy the busy city because it makes me feel more engaged in life. Other times I prefer the calmer, quieter atmosphere.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用不当及句子结构问题。说明：原句“Both of them.”可以更简洁为“Both.”；“I like to enjoy the busy city, it can make me more engaged in my life.”是两个并列句应使用连接词或分号，且用词不自然，改为“enjoy the busy city because it makes me feel more engaged in life”。“In other times I like the less and peace atmosphere which.”中“less and peace”搭配错误，应为“calmer, quieter”或“more peaceful”，句尾的which多余且使句子残缺。建议：用形容词正确搭配（calm/peaceful/quiet），注意用because或从句连贯表达原因，避免残句和多余的关系代词。

× Both my own country can provide lots of familiar scenery which could make me feel more comfortable, and more or less otherwise other countries can.

✓ Both. My own country can provide many familiar scenes that make me feel comfortable, and other countries can do that too by offering different kinds of scenery.

错误类型：句子结构错误。说明：原句“Both my own country can provide...”结构混乱且把“Both”用法不当。应先回答“Both.”然后把主句分开：“My own country can provide many familiar scenes that make me feel comfortable, and other countries can too by offering different kinds of scenery.”原句中的“which could”不必要地改变语气，且“more or less otherwise other countries can”语序颠倒、含义不清。建议：把信息分成两句或用并列结构，保持清晰的主语-谓语结构，使用简单明确的连接词（and / too / by）。