视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundant words and hesitations, correct grammar (e.g. 'evoke' and 'sceneries'), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Add a specific example to make your answer more vivid and use a linking word for coherence.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because each scene can evoke different emotions. For example, I once photographed a misty mountain at sunrise, and the image still reminds me of the calm I felt then.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details without repetition. Correct grammar (e.g. 'I enjoy picking vegetables directly and cooking') and avoid unclear words ('pastita ice'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' and provide one specific detail or short example.

示例: I prefer rural views because I grew up there and enjoy the fresh air and simple lifestyle. For example, I like picking vegetables from my family garden and cooking them, which makes the scenery feel homely and relaxing.

建议: Start with a concise topic sentence and then give one clear reason with correct vocabulary ('sea' not 'seat', 'pollution' not 'pollutions'). Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use a linking phrase like 'for example' and finish the thought with a result or opinion.

示例: It depends on the type of view; for seaside views I prefer other countries because many local beaches are polluted. For example, the water near my town often looks yellow, whereas on vacation I have seen clear blue seas that felt much cleaner and more relaxing.

× I like taking pictures of different views because I think varied views can bring evoke me different emotions and I can capture this beautiful sceneries.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I think varied views can evoke different emotions in me and I can capture these beautiful scenes.

Two issues: 'bring evoke me different emotions' mixes verbs; use a single verb 'evoke' and correct word order 'evoke different emotions in me'. Also 'this beautiful sceneries' has determiner and number errors: use plural 'these beautiful scenes'. Use of 'taking' is correct (verb + -ing) so only these corrections are applied. Suggestion: use one verb at a time (e.g., 'evoke') and match determiners and plural nouns (these + plural).

× And after that when I look back, umm, I will remember what I feel at that time.

✓ And after that, when I look back, I remember how I felt at that time.

Tense inconsistency: 'will remember' with 'when I look back' is acceptable but better to keep past reference consistent: use simple past 'remember' and past 'felt' to refer to a past moment. Also 'what I feel' should be 'how I felt' to describe emotions. Suggestion: keep tense consistent when referring to a past memory.

× I prefer rural areas because I was born and grew up in rural areas and I like the fresh air here and I enjoy the picking vegetables direct directly and cooking.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I was born and grew up there, I like the fresh air, and I enjoy picking vegetables directly and cooking.

Unnecessary article 'the' before 'picking' and incorrect 'the picking vegetables' should be 'picking vegetables' (verb + -ing used as gerund). 'Direct directly' is duplicated and awkward; use 'directly' or better omit and say 'fresh produce' or 'picking vegetables and cooking'. Suggestion: use gerund without 'the' and avoid repeated words; combine clauses with commas or conjunctions for clarity.

× And also I think the vegetables without, uh, pastita ice is.

✓ Also, I think the vegetables are fresh and have no pesticides.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It likely attempts to say vegetables are without pesticide residues. 'Without ... is' is incorrect structure. Corrected to 'the vegetables are fresh and have no pesticides' to convey meaning and ensure subject-verb agreement. Suggestion: state the quality and use correct noun 'pesticides'.

× It depends on what type of views.

✓ It depends on the type of view.

Sentence fragment: 'depends on what type of views' is awkward; use 'depends on the type of view' or 'depends on what type of view it is'. Match singular/plural appropriately. Suggestion: complete the clause to make it grammatical.

× For example like sea, I preferred the views in other countries because the seats in our country suffer from pollutions and the polluted water is yellow and umm dirty.

✓ For example, for the sea, I prefer the views in other countries because the seas in our country suffer from pollution and the water is yellow and dirty.

Tense and word choice errors: 'I preferred' should be present 'I prefer' to express general preference. 'Seats' is a typo for 'seas'. 'Pollutions' should be uncountable 'pollution'. 'Polluted water is yellow and umm dirty' simplified to 'the water is yellow and dirty'. Suggestion: use present tense for general preferences and correct noun forms.

× And by contrast the seas in other countries are blue and clear. And it can.

✓ By contrast, the seas in other countries are blue and clear, and they can be very beautiful.

Fragment 'And it can.' is incomplete and unclear. Replace with a complete clause referring to 'seas' using plural pronoun 'they' and provide a clear predicate 'can be very beautiful'. Also add comma after 'By contrast'. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments; ensure pronoun agreement with antecedent.