视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more natural, concise and use correct tense and vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "beautiful vegetations" is awkward) and correct grammar (use present simple for habits).

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing landscapes when I travel. For example, I often take shots of mountains, rivers and colorful wildflowers because they capture the place’s atmosphere, and then I share a few of my best images on social media.

建议: Provide a clear preference statement, then contrast with the other option using a linking word. Be specific about why you prefer one over the other and correct awkward phrasing (e.g., "motivates me to want to make"). Limit to about 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer rural landscapes because I find rivers, mountains and rolling hills peaceful and photogenic. However, I also appreciate urban views for their striking architecture, which can inspire my photography projects.

建议: Give a direct, confidently phrased preference and provide a clear reason with a specific example. Fix grammar and incomplete phrasing ("and actually"). Avoid repeating "I will choose"; use present simple for habits or preferences. Keep it concise and coherent with a linking word.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I often see striking cityscapes and landmarks in films and online that I haven’t seen at home. For instance, I’m fascinated by modern skylines like Tokyo’s or Dubai’s and would love to photograph them in person.

× Yes, I really enjoyed taking photographs of views while I travel.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking photographs of views while I travel.

The student used 'enjoyed' (past tense) but the context describes a habitual or general preference, so present simple 'enjoy' is correct to match 'while I travel' which indicates repeated action. Use present simple for routines and habits. Suggestion: Use present simple (I enjoy) for regular activities; reserve past tense for completed actions.

× I usually see places that have mountains, hills, beautiful vegetations like flowers and many exciting things.

✓ I usually see places that have mountains, hills, beautiful vegetation like flowers and many exciting features.

'Vegetations' is not standard; 'vegetation' is an uncountable noun and should be singular. Also 'things' is vague; 'features' is more appropriate. Use uncountable form for plant life. Suggestion: Use 'vegetation' for plant life in general and choose a more specific noun than 'things'.

× So I enjoy taking pictures of them so that I can post on social media.

✓ So I enjoy taking pictures of them so that I can post them on social media.

The verb 'post' requires an object here; include 'them' to show what is being posted. This is an object omission rather than tense. Suggestion: Ensure transitive verbs have their objects when needed (post them).

× I enjoy seeing the rivers and mountains and beautiful hills.

✓ I enjoy seeing rivers, mountains, and beautiful hills.

No grammatical tense error, but article 'the' is unnecessary when speaking generally about types of features. Remove 'the' for general statements and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use plural nouns without 'the' for general preferences: 'I enjoy seeing rivers, mountains, and hills.'

× Sometimes I also like seeing the modern structures in the city because it can be inspiring and motivates me to want to make.

✓ Sometimes I also like seeing modern structures in the city because they can be inspiring and motivate me to create things.

Mixed subject reference and verb agreement: 'modern structures' is plural so use 'they' and plural verb 'motivate' (not 'motivates'). 'Can be inspiring' is fine, but 'want to make' is incomplete and informal; 'create things' clarifies the intention. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun and verb agree with the noun number and complete the verb phrase (want to make what? => create things).

× I will choose other countries because I usually see how beautiful their places are online and on TV when I watch their movies.

✓ I would choose other countries because I usually see how beautiful their places are online and on TV when I watch their movies.

In this context the student is stating a preference rather than a definite future action. 'Would choose' or 'prefer' is more natural. Using 'will choose' sounds like a future decision; 'would' expresses hypothetical preference. Maintain present simple 'I usually see' for habitual action. Suggestion: Use 'would' or 'prefer' to express choices or preferences; use 'will' for definite future actions.

× I will choose the cityscape in foreign cities because they are usually more modern and actually.

✓ I would choose the cityscape in foreign cities because they are usually more modern and more interesting.

The sentence ends with 'and actually' which is incomplete and ungrammatical. Also 'will choose' should be 'would choose' for preference (see previous). 'More modern and more interesting' completes the comparison. Avoid dangling adverbs like 'actually' without context. Suggestion: Complete comparisons and avoid hanging words; use 'would' for hypothetical preferences and provide a clear second adjective or phrase.