视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更自然、语法更准确，并且避免冗长或不必要的信息。可先用主题句直接回应（Yes/No + 简短原因），然后用1-2句具体细节支持。注意动词时态和搭配（e.g., “located in” 应改为 “is located” 或直接省略），以及代词和单复数一致（e.g., “it include” → “it includes” 或 “they include”）。连接词可使用 because / so / for example 等，使逻辑更清晰。

示例: Yes, I do. As a college student I often have free time to explore the province around my university, which offers a variety of landscapes. For example, I enjoy photographing mountain views and rivers because they help me remember my trips.

建议: 回答需更简洁且语法要正确。先给出直接答案（I prefer rural views），然后用一至两句具体原因支持。注意人称和时态（“I'm a children” 应改为 “I’m a child” 或更自然的 “I was born in the city and grew up there”），避免重复和冗余（如重复表达“growing up”）。可用 because / since / although 连接句子。

示例: I prefer rural views because I was born and raised in a big city, so urban scenes feel familiar to me. Rural landscapes, such as rice paddies and quiet villages, seem more peaceful and interesting to photograph.

建议: 回答要更自然和口语化，先直接回答（I prefer views in my own country / both），然后提供具体理由和例子。修正语法错误（“I was born and grew” → “I was born and grew up” 或 “I was born and raised”），避免模糊表达（“enjoy my eyes” 不自然，可改为 “enjoy the scenery”）。可提到具体景点或类型以增强说服力。

示例: I prefer views in my own country because China has a huge variety of landscapes, from mountains and deserts to modern cities. For instance, I can visit the Great Wall or the karst hills in Guilin, so I don't always need to travel abroad to see impressive scenery.

× Sure, as a college student I usually have plenty of free time to travel around the province where my university located in.

✓ Sure, as a college student I usually have plenty of free time to travel around the province where my university is located.

句子缺少系动词“is”，导致时态和主谓结构不完整。应使用一般现在时的系动词“is”来连接主语“my university”和过去分词短语“located”。建议把“located in”前移并加“is”，或者改为“where my university is located”。

× Also, it include different landscapes which attract my eyesight and I'd like to take pictures of them to memorize the experience.

✓ Also, it includes different landscapes which attract my eye and I'd like to take pictures of them to remember the experience.

原句中主语“it”与动词“include”主谓不一致，动词应为第三人称单数“includes”。此外，英语中通常说“attract my eye”而不是“my eyesight”，“memorize the experience”用词生硬，改为“remember the experience”更自然。建议注意主谓一致，并使用地道表达。

× I prefer views of rural areas because I'm a children who was born in the city and growing up grow grew up there.

✓ I prefer views of rural areas because I was born in the city and grew up there.

原句使用了互相冲突的代词和数（"I'm a children"），语法错误且冗余。应直接用“I was born... and grew up...”来表达过去出生并成长的事实，避免把“children”（复数）用于第一人称单数。

× So I got familiarized with the views of the metropolis through my growing process while the rural ones have more attraction to me.

✓ So I became familiar with the views of the metropolis as I grew up, while the rural ones are more attractive to me.

原句中“got familiarized”结构较口语且不自然，建议用“became familiar”或“became familiar with”。“through my growing process”表达冗长，改为“as I grew up”更简洁。另“have more attraction to me”不地道，应改为“are more attractive to me”。时态保持过去完成的背景说明用“became/grew up”。

× As a Chinese, I was born and grew in a large country with various landscapes and different sceneries, both natural and urban, so I can enjoy my eyes domestically, not only abroad.

✓ As a Chinese, I was born and grew up in a large country with various landscapes, both natural and urban, so I can enjoy them domestically as well as abroad.

“grew”后需要“up”构成“grow up”表示“成长”。“different sceneries”可简化为“various landscapes”或“scenery”更地道；“enjoy my eyes”是错误搭配，应用“enjoy them”指代风景，且“not only abroad”结构倒置，改为“as well as abroad”或“not only... but also...”。建议注意固定搭配“grow up”和“enjoy something”。