视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using clear linking words. Avoid grammatical errors (use present tense: "perceive" → "see/think of") and redundant phrases. Keep under five sentences.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy capturing landscapes because photography helps me remember how a place felt. For example, when I travel I take photos of coastlines and city skylines to preserve the atmosphere and share it with friends.

建议: Answer directly and provide a clear reason with correct grammar and linking words. Use plural/singular forms correctly and avoid vague phrases. Give one specific example to support your preference.

示例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones because the countryside often feels quieter and more authentic. For example, old villages and farmland have traditional architecture and local customs that tell a lot about history and daily life.

建议: Give a clear choice or say you like both, then explain with specific comparative details and correct grammar. Use linking words (however, because, for example) and avoid unclear sentences like "I can neither." Keep to two or three concise sentences.

示例: I like views in both my country and abroad because each offers different experiences. For example, local landscapes remind me of childhood memories, while foreign scenery introduces new cultures and perspectives, so I enjoy both for different reasons.

× I perceived photography as a human emotional experience.

✓ I perceive photography as a human emotional experience.

The student used past tense 'perceived' but is expressing a general, current belief; this requires present simple 'perceive'. Use present tense for general statements.

× There are lots of beautiful scenery in our surrounding us.

✓ There is lots of beautiful scenery in our surroundings.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'is'; 'surrounding us' is incorrect word order and should be the plural noun 'surroundings'. Correct structure: 'There is lots of beautiful scenery in our surroundings.'

× So for example, when you go travelling you can take a lot of beautiful scenery.

✓ So, for example, when you go travelling you can take many beautiful photos of the scenery.

The verb 'take' cannot directly take 'scenery' as a countable object; use 'take photos of the scenery'. Also 'travel' spelling variant 'travelling' is acceptable but 'many' fits with countable 'photos'. This fixes noun form and collocation.

× I prefer rural area rather than urban area as a result of the rural area give more historical stories that can let human experience more natural.

✓ I prefer rural areas rather than urban areas because rural areas give more historical stories and allow people to experience a more natural life.

Use plural 'areas' to match general preference; 'as a result of' is awkward here so 'because' is clearer. Subject-verb agreement: 'areas give' not 'area give'. 'Human' used as noun is incorrect; use 'people'. Also 'experience more natural' needs 'experience a more natural life' to be grammatical.

× I think both are perceived, both of them.

✓ I think both are appealing; both of them have their own advantages.

'Are perceived' is passive and vague; use active adjective 'appealing' or state 'have their own advantages' to express preference. Keep present simple for general statement.

× It's their has their own advantages.

✓ They each have their own advantages.

Original mixes 'it' and 'their' incorrectly. Use 'They each have their own advantages' or 'Each has its own advantages' to match plural subject and possessive pronoun.

× For example our countries reminds me a lot of memories in other country.

✓ For example, my country reminds me of many memories of other countries.

Subject-verb agreement: 'country reminds' (singular) or use 'my countries' if plural. The phrase 'reminds me a lot of memories' is awkward; use 'reminds me of many memories'. Also 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' if referring generally.

× I can neither.

✓ I can't decide either.

'I can neither' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use 'I can't decide either' or 'Neither can I' to express inability to choose. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.