视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 응답은 질문에 직접적으로 대답하고 있으나, 많은 중복 표현과 망설임 소리(umm, uh), 문장 구성 오류(‘it it help’, ‘memo, recall’)가 있어 자연스럽고 명확한 전달이 어렵습니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 망설임 소리 줄이기(짧게 멈추는 것으로 대체). 2) 간결한 주제문으로 시작하고, 1~2개의 구체적 이유나 예시로 뒷받침하기. 3) 문법적 정확성(예: help me remember)과 어휘 선택 개선. 구체적 연습 방법: 질문에 답할 때 2~3문장으로 핵심(좋아하는 이유 + 구체적 예시)을 말하는 연습을 하세요.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing beautiful scenery when I travel because it helps me remember the trip. For example, I often take pictures of mountain views and local markets so I can recall specific moments later.

建议: 응답이 질문에 답하려고 했으나 발음/단어 선택 오류(‘urban area abuse’, ‘the big of the big cities’), 잦은 망설임과 불완전한 문장이 문제입니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 정확한 표현 사용(‘urban areas’ 또는 ‘rural areas’)과 명료한 이유 제시. 2) 연결어(‘because’, ‘for example’)를 적절히 사용해 문장을 완성. 3) 구체적 사례나 비교를 한두 문장으로 덧붙이기. 구체적 연습: 도시와 시골의 차이를 말할 때 각 장단점을 한 문장씩 연습하고 자연스럽게 연결해 보세요.

示例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the lively atmosphere and diverse architecture found in cities. For example, I like photographing city skylines and busy streets, which offer interesting contrasts and details.

建议: 답변은 선호를 분명히 했지만 반복되는 망설임과 문장 미완성(‘when I try.’)으로 인해 설득력이 떨어집니다. 개선 포인트: 1) 문장을 끝까지 완성하고 이유를 구체화하기. 2) 망설임 줄이고 연결어로 이유와 예시를 자연스럽게 이어가기. 3) 구체적 비교(예: 새로운 문화, 건축물, 풍경의 차이)를 제시하면 더 설득력 있음. 연습법: ‘Because… For example…’ 구조로 2문장 완성하는 연습을 반복하세요.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they feel new and exciting to me. For example, visiting places with different architecture and cultural landscapes often gives me fresh perspectives that I can't find at home.

× Yes I do. I like taking pictures of umm, beautiful scenery when I travel and it it help, uh, me to memo, uh, recall the memory of traveling and.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking pictures of beautiful scenery when I travel, and it helps me to recall the memories of my travels.

Present participle and verb forms: 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'it' (third person singular present). 'Memo' is incorrect word choice; use 'recall' or 'remember' plus 'memories'. Use plural 'memories' and noun phrase 'my travels' for clarity. Also remove filler words and duplicate 'it' for fluency. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement in present simple (he/she/it + verb+s) and choose correct noun forms (memory -> memories) and collocations ('recall the memories of my travels').

× I think, uh, I prefer urban area abuse more than rural areas view, uh, because, uh, I like the private atmosphere of the big of the big cities and yeah, for example.

✓ I think I prefer urban areas more than rural areas because I like the private atmosphere of big cities.

Singular/plural and word choice: 'urban area abuse' and 'rural areas view' are incorrect. Use 'urban areas' (plural) to contrast 'rural areas'. Remove repeated words 'of the big of the big' and use 'big cities'. Also 'private atmosphere' is acceptable but 'the' is unnecessary before 'big cities'. Suggestions: match singular/plural between compared nouns and avoid unnecessary or repeated words; keep phrases concise and use correct collocations ('urban areas', 'big cities').

× I prefer, uh, views in other countries rather than, uh, in my country. Uh, that's because in my country, uh, the views are already familiar and so when I try.

✓ I prefer views in other countries to those in my country because the views in my country are familiar to me.

Preposition and comparative construction: use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A rather than in B'. Also replace incomplete clause 'and so when I try' with a complete idea; here simplified to express reason. Use 'those' to refer back to 'views'. Suggestions: use correct pattern 'prefer A to B' and ensure sentences are complete; use pronouns like 'those' to avoid repetition.