视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid fillers and repetition, and correct verb forms and pronouns (e.g. 'it makes me feel').

示例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos, especially when I travel. For example, I like sitting by the window to capture mountains and rivers because the views help me relax and feel peaceful. Also, taking pictures keeps me entertained during long journeys.

建议: Use present tense and correct word choice. Give a clear topic sentence (e.g. 'I prefer rural views') and one specific reason with an example. Remove hesitations and duplicate words, and connect ideas with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they offer wide open landscapes and natural scenery. For instance, seeing mountains and grassy fields makes me feel grateful and calm, so I often go to the countryside when I want to relax.

建议: Answer directly with correct tense and clearer phrasing. State your preference, give a specific reason and an example, and avoid repeating phrases. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to structure the response.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they show diverse landscapes and cultural settings. For example, visiting coastal towns abroad exposed me to different architecture and local customs, which amazed me and taught me new perspectives.

× I love to take pictures especially when I'm traveling.

✓ I love taking pictures, especially when I'm traveling.

Using 'love to take' is acceptable, but 'love taking' is more natural with 'especially when I'm traveling' because it links the activity to the ongoing context; use the gerund after 'love' for smoother phrasing.

× I want to sit beside the windows so that I could see all the scenarios outside the beautiful mountains, rivers and landscapes and it make me feel relaxed and calm.

✓ I want to sit by the window so that I can see the beautiful mountains, rivers, and landscapes outside; it makes me feel relaxed and calm.

Use 'by the window' (not 'beside the windows') for natural phrasing; 'could' implies conditional past—use 'can' for present ability; 'scenarios' is incorrect here—use 'the' with listed things and plural verb agreement 'makes' (subject 'it' requires third person singular). Also add commas and combine clauses for clarity.

× Also uh, it makes me make feel not bored well.

✓ Also, it makes me feel less bored.

The phrase 'make feel' is incorrect; use 'makes me feel' with third person singular 'makes'. 'Not bored well' is ungrammatical—use 'less bored' or 'not bored' for clarity.

× I preferred abuse in rural areas because there's a lot of landscaping, beautiful scenery outside and it it is a common scene for me.

✓ I prefer rural areas because there is a lot of landscaping and beautiful scenery outside; this is a common scene for me.

Use present tense 'prefer' to answer a general preference question; 'preferred' implies past. 'Abuse' is likely a mispronunciation or typo—removed. Use 'there is' (contraction 'there's' is acceptable) and fix duplicated 'it it'.

× Those landscape mountains and grasses outside make me feel grateful for what I have.

✓ Those landscaped mountains and grasses outside make me feel grateful for what I have.

Use the adjective 'landscaped' (or simply 'the mountains and grasses') rather than 'landscape' as a modifier. Alternatively, 'landscape' as a noun needs rephrasing; choose correct adjective form.

× It's.

✓ (Remove or complete the fragment)

'It's.' is a sentence fragment without a clear completion. Either remove it or complete the thought (for example, 'It's peaceful.'). Fragments should be avoided in formal responses.

× I preferred view in other countries because if I appreciate, I appreciate the diversity and the cultural differences.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I appreciate the diversity and cultural differences.

Use present simple 'prefer' for general preference. 'Preferred' is past. 'If I appreciate, I appreciate' is redundant and ungrammatical—simplify to 'I appreciate'. Also plural 'views' fits better.

× Even the views in different country makes me feel amazed and it really gives me a lot of opportunities to learn from different places it gives me.

✓ Even the views in different countries amaze me, and they really give me many opportunities to learn about different places.

Use plural 'countries' to match 'views in different countries'. Change 'makes me feel amazed' to 'amaze me' for active voice and correct verb agreement ('views ... amaze' plural subject with plural verb). Avoid repeating 'it gives me'; use 'they give me' or 'they really give me many opportunities'.