视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar, and give one or two specific reasons with an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because each scene sparks new ideas and moods. For example, a coastal sunrise makes me feel calm, while a busy city street energizes me, so I like capturing both to reflect different perspectives.

建议: Open with a direct topic sentence, avoid awkward phrasing, use plural/singular correctly, and add a brief specific detail or example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for instance' to support your reason.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they have mountains and abundant greenery, which feel more peaceful than cities. For instance, hiking in the countryside lets me photograph vast fields and clear streams without traffic or smog.

建议: Make your position clear and avoid contradicting yourself. Use one reason and a concrete example, fix grammar (articles, plurals), and keep it concise. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to clarify your point.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer landscapes and cultures I haven't experienced before. For example, visiting Japan allowed me to photograph unique temple gardens and mountain vistas that were very different from the scenery at home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because if we are taking pictures of different views it would be giving different thoughts in our mind and also we would be be happy to see see different kind of views, different kind of perspectives and see now eyes.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because taking such pictures gives me different thoughts, and we would be happy to see different kinds of views and perspectives.

Repeated and unnecessary progressive form ('are taking') makes the sentence wordy and awkward. Use the simple gerund 'taking' to express general preference. Remove duplicates ('be be', 'see see') and correct 'different kind' to plural 'different kinds'. Also 'see now eyes' is unclear and removed. Suggestion: keep sentences concise and avoid repetition.

× I prefer the views in rural areas because in rural areas there will be lots of mountains, lots of greeneries and it would be a different types of sceneries compared to urban area.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there are lots of mountains and much greenery, and the scenery is different compared to urban areas.

Mismatch between singular and plural: 'a different types of sceneries' mixes singular and plural. Use 'the scenery is different' or 'different types of scenery'. 'Greeneries' is incorrect; 'greenery' is an uncountable noun. Also use 'urban areas' plural to match 'rural areas'.

× It would be more naturalistic and less polluted.

✓ It is more natural and less polluted.

'Naturalistic' is typically used to describe art or style, not landscapes. Use adjective 'natural'. Also use present simple 'is' for general truths rather than 'would be'.

× So I would prefer the views of rural area.

✓ So I prefer the views of rural areas.

Use simple present 'prefer' for habitual preference. Also ensure plural 'rural areas' to match earlier mention; include 'the' only when referring to a specific area. Keep subject-verb agreement with simple present.

× I prefer the views in other countries rather than my own country because if I'm going to other country I can see several views that I have never seen before.

✓ I prefer views in other countries rather than my own country because if I go to another country I can see sights I have never seen before.

Use simple present conditional structure: 'if I go' (not 'if I'm going') for general possibility. Use 'another country' (singular) or 'other countries' consistently. 'Several views' is better expressed as 'sights'.

× But in my own country I have seen a lot of views that I I prefer more to other countries views and it would give a lot of new.

✓ But in my own country I have seen many sights, so I prefer the views of other countries because they offer many new experiences.

This sentence has repetition ('I I'), unclear comparison ('prefer more to other countries views'), and an incomplete ending ('give a lot of new'). Reorganize into two clauses: contrast current familiarity with preference for novelty. Use 'many' for countable 'sights' and 'offer many new experiences' to complete the idea.