视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct grammar (e.g. use present simple consistently), and choose accurate vocabulary (e.g. 'seascapes' or 'the sea' instead of 'seaweeds'). Limit to about 3–4 sentences and use a linking phrase to add one specific detail or reason.

示例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views, especially when I travel. For example, I often photograph mountains, seascapes and dramatic skies because the light and colours change so much. I usually share my best shots on social media to remember the trip and to get feedback from friends.

建议: Improve clarity and correctness: give a direct topic sentence, fix grammar (e.g. 'I prefer rural views because they are calm and green'), remove fillers ('uh'), and make supporting details specific and coherent. Use one linking word (e.g. 'for example' or 'because') and avoid contradicting phrases (you said 'urban sites' at the end by mistake). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are calm and full of greenery. For example, my hometown is surrounded by trees and birdsong, which makes the scenery peaceful and relaxing.

建议: Be direct and precise: begin with a clear statement (e.g. 'I prefer views in my own country'), correct grammatical errors ('abroad', 'is more famous', 'mountain waves' unclear), and give one or two specific examples (e.g. mountains, beaches). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to explain why. Keep sentences short and avoid trailing endings.

示例: I prefer views in my own country, Sri Lanka, because it has incredibly varied scenery. For example, we have misty mountains and golden beaches close to each other, so I can enjoy different landscapes without travelling far.

× If I see a beautiful scenery or mountain, and especially seaweeds, I always tend to take photographs.

✓ If I see a beautiful scene or a mountain, and especially seaweed, I always tend to take photographs.

The word 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by 'a'; use 'a scene' for a countable instance. 'Seaweeds' is usually used as the uncountable noun 'seaweed' when referring to the plant generally. Also adding the article 'a' before 'mountain' is necessary for singular countable nouns. Suggestion: use 'a scene' and 'seaweed' to match standard usage.

× And also when it's come to sky, I adore pretty sky.

✓ And also when it comes to the sky, I adore pretty skies.

The phrase 'when it's come to' is incorrect; the correct present tense phrase is 'when it comes to'. 'Sky' as a general concept is uncountable, but when referring to particular instances use the plural 'skies' or add the article 'the' for the general noun. Suggestion: use 'when it comes to the sky' or 'I adore pretty skies' depending on intended meaning.

× If I see a pretty sky, always took photographs and put them on my social media.

✓ If I see a pretty sky, I always take photographs and put them on my social media.

The original sentence mixes present condition ('If I see') with a past tense verb 'took', which is inconsistent. For habitual present actions, use present simple: 'I always take' and 'put'. Suggestion: keep verbs in present simple for habitual actions.

× I prefer more, uh, rural area, uh, views because it's so calm, It's so greenery.

✓ I prefer rural area views because they are so calm and so green.

'Prefer more' is awkward; 'prefer' already expresses preference. 'Rural area' needs to be plural or used with an article; 'rural area views' or 'rural areas' is clearer. 'It's so greenery' is incorrect: 'greenery' is a noun meaning plants, while 'green' is the adjective to describe views; or say 'there is so much greenery'. Suggestion: use 'they are so calm and so green' or 'there is so much greenery'.

× Uh, whenever I go to my home, uh, it's in a rural area in candy, it's surrounded by the greenery and all the sound bird sounds.

✓ Whenever I go home, it is in a rural area in Kandy; it is surrounded by greenery and the sounds of birds.

'Go to my home' is less natural than 'go home'. 'Candy' likely intends the place name 'Kandy' and should be capitalized. 'The greenery' can be 'greenery' (no article) and 'all the sound bird sounds' is ungrammatical; use 'the sounds of birds' or 'birdsong'. Suggestion: simplify to 'it is surrounded by greenery and the sounds of birds.'

× So I prefer the view of urban sites with all the greenery and.

✓ So I prefer the rural views with all the greenery.

The sentence is incomplete and contradictory: earlier the speaker preferred rural views, but here 'view of urban sites with all the greenery and.' is unfinished. Likely intended: 'rural views' rather than 'urban'. Remove dangling conjunction and complete the thought. Suggestion: state 'So I prefer rural views with all the greenery.'

× I didn't get any chance to visit a board yet, so of course I adore all the views in Sri Lanka.

✓ I haven't had a chance to visit abroad yet, so of course I adore all the views in Sri Lanka.

'Didn't get any chance' is grammatically acceptable but in this context present perfect 'haven't had a chance' is more natural when the situation continues to the present. 'Visit a board' is incorrect; the intended phrase is 'visit abroad'. Suggestion: use 'I haven't had a chance to visit abroad yet.'

× I think Sri Lanka more, uh, famous for that and one of the most popular, uh, destination among tourists for that we have starting from the mountain weaves to beaches, uh, in every climate.

✓ I think Sri Lanka is more famous for that and is one of the most popular destinations among tourists; we have everything from mountain views to beaches in every climate.

Missing copula 'is' after 'Sri Lanka'. 'More famous for that' needs comparison or clarification; adding 'is more famous for that' works. 'One of the most popular destination' should be 'destinations' (plural). 'For that we have starting from' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'we have everything from'. 'Mountain weaves' is incorrect; likely 'mountain views'. Suggestion: include 'is' verbs and correct plural forms and collocations: 'one of the most popular destinations' and 'everything from mountain views to beaches.'

× So I think I prefer and I adore.

✓ So I think I prefer it and I adore it.

The sentence lacks a clear object: 'prefer' and 'adore' need objects (what is preferred and adored). Add 'it' to refer to the views. Also keep tense consistent with present simple. Suggestion: 'I think I prefer it and I adore it.'