视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp (a really), một số từ dùng không chính xác (landscaped), và câu hơi dài, thiếu liên từ để mạch lạc. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sửa ngữ pháp, dùng từ đúng, và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn. Giữ độ dài tối đa 5 câu.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos because they help me remember special trips and places. I especially like capturing landscapes such as mountains, beaches and city skylines. For example, on my last trip I photographed a sunset over the harbor that reminded me of the whole day.

建议: Câu trả lời rõ ràng và có ví dụ, nhưng một vài lỗi nhỏ về từ vựng/ cấu trúc (stumbling different dishes → trying different dishes; 'too quiet for' thiếu từ hoàn chỉnh). Nên dùng liên từ để nối ý hợp lý và cung cấp một câu kết ngắn gọn. Giữ ngắn gọn dưới 5 câu.

示例: I prefer urban views because I love the energy of city life and the variety of cafes and restaurants. For instance, I often meet friends for coffee and try different dishes in new eateries. I visit the countryside only on holidays since it feels too quiet for my taste.

建议: Ý chính rõ nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ thừa/thiếu (beautiful amazing → redundant; scenery landscapes → wordy; in the beach → on the beach; have try to go out for another country → incorrect). Nên nói ngắn gọn, sửa cấu trúc động từ, và cho một ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ sở thích. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

示例: I prefer the landscapes in my country because Vietnam has stunning mountains and beaches. For example, I love the terraced fields in the north and the clear beaches in the south. However, I would also like to see famous views abroad, such as Europe’s historic cities, someday.

× Of course, taking pictures is an really useful way to keep our memories when we go out to different places.

✓ Of course, taking pictures is a really useful way to keep our memories when we go to different places.

The indefinite article 'a' should be used before 'really' as part of the noun phrase 'a really useful way.' Also, 'go out to different places' is wordy; 'go to different places' is more natural.

× Also capture the landscaped, the beautiful views, the city or the mountainous area or whatever you go with your friend or your family.

✓ I also capture landscapes, beautiful views, the city, or mountainous areas when I go with friends or family.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb form; it uses fragments and incorrect nouns ('landscaped' should be 'landscapes'). Use a complete clause with subject 'I' and verb 'capture.' Remove unnecessary articles and pluralize nouns appropriately.

× For example, I like going out for coffee with my friends and stumbling different dishes.

✓ For example, I like going out for coffee with my friends and trying different dishes.

'Stumbling' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'try' meaning to taste different dishes. Use the -ing form 'trying' to match 'like going' structure.

× I only visit the countryside occasionally on holidays because I find it too quiet for.

✓ I only visit the countryside occasionally on holidays because I find it too quiet for me.

The preposition phrase 'too quiet for' requires an object (e.g., 'me'). Without the object the sentence is incomplete. Adding 'me' clarifies who finds it too quiet.

× I am really into the beautiful amazing scenery landscapes in Vietnam, especially in the mountainous areas or in the beach.

✓ I am really into the beautiful, amazing landscapes in Vietnam, especially the mountainous areas or the beaches.

Redundant adjectives 'beautiful amazing' should be separated by a comma or reduced. 'Scenery landscapes' is awkward; use 'landscapes' alone. Use plural 'beaches' and appropriate articles: 'the beaches'.

× However, I do want to have try to go out for another country to have a view.

✓ However, I do want to try to go to another country to see the scenery.

The phrase 'have try' is ungrammatical; use 'try.' Also use the verb 'go to another country' (not 'go out for another country') and 'see the scenery' is more natural than 'have a view.'