视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Старайтесь говорить более связно и без ненужных пауз и повторов. Начните с чётного утверждения, затем кратко поясните причину и приведите конкретный пример. Уменьшите количество слов-паразитов (uh, umm) и избегайте лишних повторов («I'm, I'm», «a, a»). Поддерживайте не более 3–4 предложений.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photographs of different views. I especially like nature photography because it helps me relax and capture peaceful scenes. For example, I often take my camera to the park on weekends and photograph trees and streams when I go for a walk.

建议: Дайте чёткий выбор и подкрепите его ясными причинами с использованием связок (for example, however, also). Избегайте повторов и закончите мысль полным предложением. Уточняйте, что именно вам нравится в каждом типе пейзажа и приводите конкретные примеры.

示例: I enjoy both urban and rural views for different reasons. For example, in cities I like photographing modern architecture and tall buildings because of their lines and lights. However, in rural areas I prefer natural landscapes, such as fields and old cottages, which feel more tranquil.

建议: Сформулируйте одно ясное утверждение, затем объясните причину конкретно и без лишних слов. Уберите повторения («both both», «my my», «the the») и завершите предложение логичным дополнением (например, «because the scenery is familiar and peaceful»). Добавьте пример, чтобы сделать ответ убедительным.

示例: I prefer views in my own country if I had to choose. This is because the landscapes are familiar and often very peaceful, which makes it easier to capture authentic moments. For instance, I enjoy photographing quiet coastal villages near my hometown because they have unique light and atmosphere.

× Definitely I'm, I'm keen on, uh, taking like a, a photography of the nature, especially, uh, when I have free time or when I, uh, just uh, walking out. I, umm, I.

✓ Definitely. I'm keen on taking photographs of nature, especially when I have free time or when I'm just walking outside.

The original sentence has multiple disfluencies, incorrect article use and wrong noun form. Use 'photographs' (plural) or 'photography' without 'a'; 'of nature' is correct without 'the'; 'walking outside' is the correct phrase and requires the auxiliary 'am' for the present continuous. Remove fillers and duplicate words to make the sentence clear and grammatical. Suggestion: plan the sentence mentally before speaking, use 'I enjoy taking photographs of nature' as a clear alternative.

× Sure, I enjoy both. In urban areas you can find the find the high newly built constructions and I want to make some photographs of them when it when it comes to rural air.

✓ Sure, I enjoy both. In urban areas you can find newly built tall buildings, and I want to take some photographs of them. When it comes to the rural areas, ...

Problems include repetition ('the find the'), incorrect adjective order ('high newly built constructions' should be 'newly built tall buildings'), wrong noun choice ('constructions' is awkward), and 'rural air' is incorrect—use 'rural areas'. Also split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use adjective order opinion/size/age/type/place, e.g., 'newly built tall buildings'. Use 'take photographs' instead of 'make photographs'. Continue the sentence about rural areas appropriately.

× I enjoy both both If I had to choose, I would prefer my my own country. The the reason is that my in my own country you can photographing the and the peaceful.

✓ I enjoy both. If I had to choose, I would prefer my own country. The reason is that in my country you can photograph peaceful scenery.

Errors include word repetition, incorrect article usage ('The the'), wrong verb form ('photographing' used incorrectly here), and awkward phrase 'the peaceful'. Use 'photograph peaceful scenery' or 'photograph the peaceful countryside'. Also remove duplicated words. Suggestion: say 'I would prefer my own country because it has peaceful scenery that I can photograph.'