视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and grammatical, use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition and filler words. For example, say you don't usually take photos because you lack interest or equipment, then briefly explain why. Use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to connect ideas.

示例: No, I don't usually take pictures because I'm not very interested in photography. Also, I don't own a proper camera, and although my smartphone can take decent photos, I rarely bother to use it for landscapes.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with specific examples and a linking word. Correct common grammar issues (e.g., 'there are' not 'there is', and nouns capitalized only when needed). Keep it concise and avoid hesitation sounds.

示例: I prefer rural areas because they offer more natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy the forests, lakes and open fields, which feel peaceful and are great for relaxing and taking walks.

建议: Start with a clear answer, then provide specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and hesitations. You can mention diversity of landscapes and give one or two examples from your country to support your view, using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because it has a wide variety of landscapes. For example, China has mountains in the west and coastal scenery in the east, so I can find very different and interesting views without traveling abroad.

× No, I don't like take a pictures umm because I don't have the chance to own a camera camera to take a picture.

✓ No, I don't like taking pictures because I don't have the chance to own a camera to take pictures.

The verb 'like' when followed by another verb requires the gerund form (verb + -ing): 'like taking'. Also 'a pictures' is incorrect plural; use 'pictures' without 'a'. Remove repeated word 'camera' and make plural consistently. Suggestion: use 'I don't like taking pictures' and 'to own a camera to take pictures'.

× Even now I I I have the smartphones that are easy to take pictures but I don't.

✓ Even now I have a smartphone that makes it easy to take pictures, but I don't.

Use singular 'a smartphone' rather than 'the smartphones' when speaking generally. Also add a verb 'makes' to link the clause 'that makes it easy to take pictures'. The original sentence lacked clear structure. Suggestion: simplify to 'I have a smartphone that makes it easy to take pictures, but I don't.'

× Oh, OK. Oh, of course I prefer the rural areas. Yeah, in the rural areas there is always can easy to say natural views, especially Sun forest, lake and the grounds.

✓ Oh, of course I prefer rural areas. Yeah, in rural areas there are always many natural views, especially the sun, forests, lakes and fields.

Preposition 'in the rural areas' is redundant; use 'in rural areas'. The phrase 'there is always can easy to say natural views' is ungrammatical: use 'there are always many natural views'. Nouns need correct plural forms: 'forests, lakes' and 'fields' (not 'grounds'). 'Sun' should be 'the sun' or omitted; listing 'the sun' with landscapes is odd—better 'sunsets' if intended. Suggestion: use 'there are many natural views, especially forests, lakes and fields.'

× Umm I prefer to see the beautiful views in my own country such as the such as China as as as to know China has China is a very large country and has different views.

✓ I prefer to see beautiful views in my own country, such as China, because China is a very large country and has many different landscapes.

The original repeats phrases and lacks clear connectors. Replace repetitive 'such as the such as' with a single 'such as' and use 'because' to show reason. Use 'many different landscapes' rather than 'different views' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: 'I prefer to see beautiful views in my own country, such as China, because China is very large and has many different landscapes.'