视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Give a direct, well-formed topic sentence, then add one clear supporting detail. Correct grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid fillers. Use a linking word when adding reason or condition.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I photograph landscapes to remember the places, but at home I only take photos if the scene is especially striking.

建议: Start with a clear preference sentence (urban or rural). Use correct nouns and verbs, and explain why with specific details. Use linking words like because or since to connect ideas and avoid unclear words like 'you' and 'Juban' unless you clarify them.

示例: I prefer urban views because city streets often display local culture and historic buildings. For instance, I like photographing markets and old architecture since they capture memories of daily life.

建议: Give a concise preference statement and a clear reason with specific examples. Correct word choice (countries, places) and avoid fillers like 'yeah'. Use linking words such as because or so to show cause and effect.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because I want to see new landscapes and cultures. For example, visiting a foreign city lets me photograph different architecture and food markets that I can't find at home.

× Yes, I do like taking picture of different view.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views.

The nouns 'picture' and 'view' need plural forms because the speaker refers generally to more than one picture and more than one view. Use 'pictures' and 'views' for correct agreement. Suggestion: when speaking about things in general, use plurals (e.g., 'taking pictures of different views').

× Hmm depend on situation or circumstance.

✓ It depends on the situation or the circumstances.

The original lacks a subject and correct verb form. Use the subject 'It' with the third-person singular verb 'depends' and include articles: 'the situation' and 'the circumstances'. Suggestion: always include a subject and match verb form (It + depends).

× I prefer you in Juban area because it's show off culture and memory.

✓ I prefer the Juban area because it shows off the culture and memories.

'you' is incorrect pronoun here; use 'the Juban area'. 'it's show off' has wrong verb form and missing article: use 'it shows off'. 'culture and memory' should be 'the culture and memories' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: refer to places by name with 'the' when appropriate and conjugate verbs correctly ('it shows').

× I do prefer viewing other country than my own country because yeah I already saw many place so the same you in my own country.

✓ I prefer visiting other countries to my own because I have already seen many places here, so they are similar to those in my country.

Multiple pronoun and noun errors: 'viewing other country' should be 'visiting other countries'; use plural 'countries' and 'places'. Use comparative structure 'prefer X to Y'. 'I already saw' needs present perfect 'I have already seen' for experience. 'so the same you in my own country' is unclear and incorrect pronoun usage; corrected to 'so they are similar to those in my country.' Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B', pluralize countable nouns, and use present perfect for life experiences.

× So I like to experience new you in other country.

✓ So I like to experience new things in other countries.

'you' is incorrect and should be 'things' or 'experiences'; also pluralize 'country' to 'countries' when speaking generally. Suggestion: use 'new things' or 'new experiences' and plural nouns when referring generally.