视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitations and make the answer more concise while keeping relevant details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one supporting detail (e.g., past study) and possibly a brief reason why you enjoy it. Use fewer filler words and correct small grammar issues ("as an undergraduate student" or "when I was an undergraduate").

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I studied photography when I was an undergraduate majoring in journalism, which helped me learn composition and lighting. Because of that training, I like capturing interesting scenes and moments when I travel or walk around my city.

建议: Be more concise and use linking words to connect reasons. Replace repeated fillers and avoid repeating verbs ("like go hiking, like climbing"). Provide one or two specific examples of scenes you prefer to make your answer more vivid.

示例: I prefer rural areas because I love being close to nature and doing outdoor activities. For example, I enjoy hiking and climbing mountains, where I can photograph sweeping valleys and sunrise views that make me feel refreshed and calm.

建议: Complete your thought and avoid trailing off. Start with a clear position (both) then give a concise reason and one specific example comparing home and abroad. Remove hesitations and finish the sentence logically.

示例: I appreciate views both at home and abroad because my country is very diverse and offers many different landscapes, such as coastal cliffs and deserts. However, I also enjoy visiting other countries to experience unfamiliar architecture and cultural scenes, like colorful street markets or historic cityscapes.

× I once studied photography when I was just, uh, umm, undergraduate student in majoring in journalism.

✓ I once studied photography when I was just an undergraduate student, majoring in journalism.

Missing article 'an' before the singular noun 'undergraduate student' (article error and preposition context). Use 'an' for a singular countable noun starting with a vowel sound. Also place the participial phrase 'majoring in journalism' after the noun it modifies and separate with a comma for clarity.

× I do like taking pictures and I once studied photography when I was just, uh, umm, undergraduate student in majoring in journalism.

✓ I do like taking pictures, and I once studied photography when I was an undergraduate student majoring in journalism.

The phrase 'in majoring in journalism' is incorrect. Use the participle 'majoring' directly after the noun it modifies ('student majoring in journalism') without the preposition 'in'. Also add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses.

× I like outdoor sports, like go hiking, like climbing the mountains.

✓ I like outdoor sports, like going hiking and climbing mountains.

After 'like' when listing activities, use the gerund form ('going', 'climbing'), not the base verb 'go'. Also 'climbing the mountains' is more natural as 'climbing mountains' unless referring to specific mountains.

× So rural areas always offer a view that can give me more strength and calm me down.

✓ So rural areas always offer views that can give me more strength and calm me down.

'A view' is singular while 'rural areas' is plural; subjects and their complements should agree in number. Use the plural 'views' to match 'rural areas'. Alternatively, rephrase: 'a view that can give me more strength' would require a singular subject like 'a rural area'.

× I just umm because my country is a big country and things are totally different everywhere, so I enjoy going to different places and.

✓ I just... because my country is a big country and things are totally different everywhere, so I enjoy going to different places.

The original ends with an incomplete conjunction 'and' making the sentence unfinished. Remove the trailing 'and' or complete the sentence. Also filler 'umm' can be replaced with an ellipsis or removed; keep 'just' with a pause if needed. Ensure the sentence ends with a complete thought.