视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và rõ ràng ý chính: tránh lặp từ và sửa các lỗi như “feed up” (không đúng) và cấu trúc câu không hoàn chỉnh. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ với từ nối đơn giản như “because” hoặc “so”. Hạn chế tiếng “umm” và giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially natural landscapes. I do this because nature is calming and I can focus on small details. For example, I often photograph sunsets and rivers to record memorable moments.

建议: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và lựa chọn ý chính: cần trả lời trực tiếp (rural or urban) rồi giải thích ngắn gọn với liên từ như “because” hoặc “however”. Tránh lặp từ và sửa phát âm/diễn đạt không rõ. Giữ câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có ví dụ cụ thể về điểm bạn thích ở từng nơi.

示例: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and offer more natural scenes. However, I also appreciate urban views for interesting architecture and lively streets. For instance, I enjoy photographing old trees in the countryside and historic buildings in the city.

建议: Sửa lại ngữ pháp và loại bỏ lặp từ: diễn đạt súc tích hơn, tránh lặp nhiều lần một từ như “peaceful” và sửa lỗi mạo từ (“a ideal” → “an ideal”). Nên giải thích cụ thể vì sao bạn thích cảnh ở nước mình (ví dụ: không ô nhiễm, văn hoá, thiên nhiên) và dùng liên từ để nối ý.

示例: I prefer views in my own country because the landscapes are peaceful and less polluted. For example, there are many clean beaches and green hills that make it an ideal place to relax. Also, local traditions add charm to the scenery.

× Yes, of course I really like to take some pictures, especially for nature because I feed up because I easily focus something.

✓ Yes, of course. I really like taking pictures, especially of nature, because I feel relaxed and I can easily focus on subjects.

The verb 'like' when followed by a general activity uses the gerund: 'like taking' not 'like to take' (both possible but gerund is natural here). 'Especially for nature' should be 'especially of nature' (preposition error). 'I feed up' is incorrect; intended meaning likely 'I feel relaxed' or 'I feel fed up' — context suggests relaxation so use 'feel relaxed'. 'I easily focus something' requires the preposition 'on' and 'something' is vague; 'subjects' is clearer. Suggestions: use gerund after 'like' for habitual actions, correct prepositions, and choose the verb that matches intended meaning.

× So I want to take some pictures to umm, record them.

✓ So I want to take some pictures to record them.

The sentence contains hesitation filler 'umm' which should be omitted in written responses. The structure 'take some pictures to record them' is acceptable, but more natural is 'to record those moments' or 'to capture them'. Suggest removing fillers and using more precise nouns.

× I prefer it I we I prefer boss.

✓ I prefer rural areas.

The original is ungrammatical and contains repeated words and unclear 'boss'. Simplify to a clear subject+verb+object: 'I prefer rural areas.' Suggest planning a concise response and avoiding repetitions or irrelevant words.

× I feel that rural, rural area or urban area or have each unique beauty so.

✓ I feel that rural areas and urban areas each have their own unique beauty.

Incorrect plurality and word order: use plural 'rural areas' and 'urban areas'. 'Have each unique beauty' should be 'each have their own unique beauty' to show possession and correct word order. Suggest using parallel structure and possessive 'their own' for clarity.

× Unique beauties is.

✓ They have unique beauty.

Fragment with subject-verb disagreement. 'Beauties is' is incorrect; use a full clause like 'They have unique beauty' or 'There is unique beauty.' Ensure subjects and verbs agree in number and avoid sentence fragments.

× I prefer my country.

✓ I prefer my country.

This sentence is grammatically correct and appropriate in the present tense to express preference. No change needed.

× My, my country has peaceful, peaceful, peaceful scenes and a ideal destination to live because it's it's because it's not pollution.

✓ My country has peaceful scenes and is an ideal place to live because it is not polluted.

Remove repeated words. 'A ideal' should be 'an ideal' (article before vowel sound). 'A destination to live' is unnatural; use 'place to live'. 'It's not pollution' is incorrect; use passive adjective 'not polluted' or 'has little pollution'. Also remove repeated 'it's it's because it's'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, use correct articles ('a' vs 'an'), and use adjective forms for states (polluted) or noun phrases ('little pollution').