视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct some grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "because", "so", "and") naturally, and avoid repeating the same idea (e.g. "enjoy" and "feel").

示例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because it is a relaxing hobby. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines so I can remember the colours and atmosphere later. This helps me feel calm when I look back at the pictures.

建议: Correct grammar and vocabulary, and be specific about details. Use a clear topic sentence and then add one or two vivid supporting details with linking words (e.g. "because", "for example"). Avoid unclear phrases like "sitting on the cross" and use correct nouns and verbs.

示例: I prefer rural views because I love nature. For example, I enjoy sitting on a hill with fresh air and listening to birds singing, which makes me feel relaxed and peaceful.

建议: Make the answer logically organized and fix tense and article errors. Start with a direct statement (e.g. "It depends"), then explain why with clearer examples and correct grammar. Use linking words like "because" and "however" to connect ideas.

示例: It depends. I prefer views in my own country because I have not travelled abroad, and my country has many beautiful natural places. However, if I visit another country with similar natural scenery, I would enjoy its views as well.

× I enjoy taking pictures of different view because I think it is a great hobby that I can enjoy and I can look back at the photos when I'm at home or when I feel bored and I can remember the feeling that I felt when I was there.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I think it is a great hobby that I can enjoy, and I can look back at the photos when I'm at home or when I feel bored, and remember the feeling I had when I was there.

In English, 'view' in this context should be plural 'views' because the speaker refers to multiple scenes. Also tighten repeated 'can' and simplify tense: 'felt' becomes 'had' to match past experience. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general/multiple items and reduce redundant auxiliary verbs.

× For me, I prefer views in the countryside because I'm a person who love natural.

✓ For me, I prefer views in the countryside because I'm a person who loves nature.

When the subject is 'who' referring to 'I' in a relative clause, the verb must agree with the singular subject 'person', so use 'loves'. Also 'natural' is an adjective; the correct noun is 'nature'. Suggestion: use 'loves nature' for native phrasing.

× I enjoy sitting on the cross with the fresh air come touch my body and I love hearing the bird voice or the bird thing, Yes.

✓ I enjoy sitting on the grass with the fresh air touching my body, and I love hearing the birds singing.

Preposition 'on' is fine with 'grass' but 'cross' is wrong (likely 'grass'). 'Come touch' is incorrect sequence; use present participle 'touching' to show simultaneous action. 'Bird voice or the bird thing' is unnatural; use plural 'birds' and verb 'singing' for sound. Suggestion: choose correct noun ('grass') and use present participle for ongoing sensations, and use natural collocations like 'birds singing'.

× It depends because I never go to other country but I enjoy watching you in my country because my country has a lot of natural place.

✓ It depends because I have never been to other countries, but I enjoy sightseeing in my country because my country has a lot of natural places.

Use plural 'countries' when speaking generally. 'Never go to' is awkward for past experience; use present perfect 'have never been to'. 'Watching you' is incorrect contextually; likely 'sightseeing' or 'seeing places'. 'Natural place' should be plural 'natural places'. Suggestion: use correct verb tense for past experiences and plural forms for general references.

× As I mentioned, I'm a person who love natural so if the other countries has natural place, I would love it.

✓ As I mentioned, I'm a person who loves nature, so if other countries have natural places, I would love them.

'Who' clause requires 'loves' for third person singular 'person'. 'Natural' should be noun 'nature'. 'The other countries has' is wrong: plural 'countries' needs plural verb 'have'. 'Place' should be plural 'places', and refer back with 'them' not 'it'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and match noun forms; use plural verbs with plural nouns and plural pronouns to refer back.