视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words and correct grammar. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. “go ahead person,” “give my family to wait this place”). Use varied vocabulary like “enjoy,” “capture,” “scenery,” and mention who you share photos with and why.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I like to capture scenery when I travel because it helps me remember the place, and I often send photos to my family so they can see what I discovered.

建议: Give a clear preference and a concise reason. Use linking words (however, because) to contrast urban and rural views. Remove fillers (umm, ah) and unclear phrases like “free free.” Provide a concrete example of what you like in rural or urban settings.

示例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are more peaceful and varied. For example, I enjoy the open fields and rivers in the countryside, which feel very different from the busy streets and tall buildings I see every day in the city.

建议: Answer directly: state a clear preference and give a specific reason. Replace vague labels like “go ahead person” with phrases such as “I like to explore.” Limit to 2–3 sentences and include an example of what appeals to you about other countries (culture, architecture, landscapes).

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes to explore. For instance, I would love to photograph the historic streets and modern architecture in Germany, which are very different from what I see at home.

× Yes, I realized to take picture of different views because I am go ahead person so I really like to explore different place and when I go to other place I would like to use my camera to take photo of this place to give my family to wait this place.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I am a go-ahead person, so I really like to explore different places and when I go to other places I like to use my camera to take photos of these places to show my family.

The sentence contains incorrect verb + -ing forms and related word choices. 'Realized to take picture' is incorrect; the verb 'enjoy' + -ing (taking) is appropriate. Use plural 'pictures' and 'places' to match meaning (also covers singular/plural but primary issue is gerund use). 'Would like to use' is acceptable but 'like to use' keeps present habitual tense. 'To give my family to wait this place' is unclear; replace with 'to show my family.' Suggestion: use verbs that naturally take -ing (enjoy, like) and use gerunds for activities (taking pictures).

× Maybe because I am a person, live in urban areas, so I can meet the umm landscape of urban areas every time, every day, so I free free the views of uh, rural areas.

✓ Maybe because I live in an urban area, I see the urban landscape every day, so I prefer the views of rural areas.

Preposition and article use is incorrect. Use 'live in an urban area' (singular with article) or 'live in urban areas' for generalization. 'Meet the landscape' is wrong; use 'see' or 'experience.' 'Every time, every day' is redundant; 'every day' suffices. 'Free free the views' is unintelligible—likely meant 'prefer.' Suggestion: choose correct prepositions ('in') and articles ('an'), use 'see' for encountering views, and remove redundancies.

× MMM I am a go ahead person so I really like to explore every place in this world umm especially other umm especially other place with my country.

✓ I am a go-ahead person, so I really like exploring places around the world, especially places outside my country.

Use of 'like to explore' vs 'like exploring'—both are correct, but here gerund 'exploring' flows better. Original has awkward phrasing 'every place in this world' and 'other place with my country.' Correct to 'places around the world' and 'places outside my country.' Suggestion: use gerunds for activities and simplify expressions like 'outside my country.'

× So I really like to umm views in other countries especially Germany.

✓ So I really like the views in other countries, especially in Germany.

Missing appropriate preposition 'in' before countries and missing article before 'views.' Use 'the views in other countries' and 'especially in Germany.' Suggestion: include prepositions like 'in' with countries and use 'the' when referring to specific views.