视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarify your main point, remove filler words, correct grammar (don’t/like conflict, tense and gerund forms), and organize ideas with linking words. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes or No + brief reason), then add 1–2 specific supporting details with connectors. Watch pronunciation and reduce hesitations.

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos because they help me preserve memories of beautiful places and landscapes. For example, I often photograph sunsets and old streets, and then I share the best shots with friends on social media. I also experiment with different angles and lighting to make each picture more interesting.

建议: Start with a concise topic sentence and use correct articles and verb forms ('a rural area' → 'rural areas' or 'the countryside'). Use linking words to connect reasons and include a specific example to support your preference.

示例: I prefer rural areas because the scenery is more natural and peaceful. For instance, countryside walks near my village have many trees, birds, and fresh air, which help me relax and forget city noise. Because of this calm atmosphere, I often go there on weekends to recharge.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and avoid unnecessary negatives. Use linking words (‘because’, ‘for example’) as you did, and add one specific personal example or detail to make your answer more vivid. Keep sentences concise and check small grammar points (‘culture’ → ‘culture’ or ‘cultural sites’).

示例: I prefer the views in my own country because I can find a wide range of landscapes nearby. For example, within a few hours I can visit a beach, climb a mountain, or walk through a historical town, so I get both natural scenery and cultural sites without traveling abroad.

× I don't like, uh, taking pictures, uh, because it's helped me to keep memories of different uh, places and charming sceneries.

✓ I don't like taking pictures because they help me keep memories of different places and charming scenery.

The original uses 'it's helped' which incorrectly combines a contraction for 'it is' with a past participle; context requires simple present 'help' to express a general truth. Also 'it's' is ambiguous and 'sceneries' is uncountable in this sense; 'scenery' should be used. Change 'taking pictures, uh, because' to remove filler and make the sentence fluent. Suggested focus: use simple present for general facts (help), use uncountable 'scenery' rather than plural 'sceneries', and avoid incorrect contractions with past participles.

× Uh, I also like uh, to sharing pictures on social media to my friends.

✓ I also like sharing pictures on social media with my friends.

After 'like', use the gerund form 'sharing' or the infinitive 'to share' but not 'to sharing'. Also preposition 'to my friends' is incorrect here; use 'with my friends' to indicate sharing something together. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× Uh, I also like, uh, taking pictures from different angle and light.

✓ I also like taking pictures from different angles and in different light.

'From different angle' needs plural 'angles' to match 'different' and general practice (singular/plural agreement). 'and light' should be 'in different light' or 'under different lighting' to use correct preposition and noun form. Also remove extra fillers.

× I prefer a rural areas because the scenery is very natural with lots of trees, fresh air and many birds.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the scenery is very natural with lots of trees, fresh air, and many birds.

'a rural areas' incorrectly combines singular article 'a' with plural noun 'areas'; remove the article to use plural 'rural areas' or change to 'a rural area'. Commas added for list clarity. 'scenery is very natural' is acceptable.

× I find at the peaceful atmosphere helps me relax and escape the noise and crowds in cities.

✓ I find that the peaceful atmosphere helps me relax and escape the noise and crowds of the city.

The original has an extra word 'at' and missing conjunction 'that'. Correct structure is 'I find that ... helps me...'. Also use 'the city' or 'cities' consistently; 'the noise and crowds of the city' is natural. Ensure sentence contains proper subject and verb clause.

× I have not visited many countries yet, so I prefer the views in my own country because it has many beautiful landscapes and interesting places to explore.

✓ I have not visited many countries yet, so I prefer the views in my own country because it has many beautiful landscapes and interesting places to explore.

This sentence is grammatically correct; present perfect 'have not visited' is appropriate to indicate experience up to now. No change needed.

× For instance, there are beaches, mountains, and historical towns nearby, so I can enjoy both natural and culture without traveling abroad.

✓ For instance, there are beaches, mountains, and historic towns nearby, so I can enjoy both nature and culture without traveling abroad.

'Historical towns' is acceptable but 'historic towns' is more natural here. More importantly, 'both natural and culture' mixes an adjective 'natural' with a noun 'culture'; change to 'nature and culture' to use two nouns that parallel each other. This fixes adjective/noun mismatch.