视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation words, and give one specific example to support why you like photographing views. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, "because" and "so"). Also avoid repetition like "different" twice.

示例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture moments and relax. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the riverside, and later I look at these photos when I feel stressed because they calm me down.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, like), and add one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Make the contrast with urban areas clearer and more fluent.

示例: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and I can enjoy natural sunsets and sunrises every day. In contrast, urban areas feel crowded and the buildings often block the scenery.

建议: Provide a complete, fluent response: start with a clear statement, avoid fillers, and finish the thought. Give one specific detail or example about your hometown (a park, mountain, or river). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "because" and "so".

示例: I prefer views everywhere, but if I had to choose, I prefer my home country because my hometown has many green parks and clean air. For example, I often walk along the riverside nearby where the trees and fresh air make the scenery refreshing.

× And definitely I love to take pictures of different views because I want to capture every different movement in my phone.

✓ And definitely I love taking pictures of different views because I want to capture every different movement on my phone.

Use of 'love to take' is acceptable but 'love taking' is more natural with hobbies; more importantly, the preposition with 'phone' is incorrect (see next). Change 'in my phone' to 'on my phone' because digital content is described as being on a device. Suggestion: use 'love taking' and 'on my phone' for natural phrasing.

× So whenever I feel stressed, at that time I prefer to see the view pictures which makes me really relax.

✓ So whenever I feel stressed, I prefer to look at pictures of views because they really relax me.

The phrase 'at that time' is redundant after 'whenever' and adverb placement is awkward. 'See the view pictures' is unnatural; use 'look at pictures of views'. 'Which makes me really relax' has incorrect word order and verb form; use 'they really relax me.' Suggestion: remove redundancy and place adverbs/objects next to verbs for clarity.

× To be honest, I prefer to see the views in rural areas, uh, because there is a lot of peace.

✓ To be honest, I prefer to see the views in rural areas because there is a lot of peace and quiet.

'There is a lot of peace' is grammatically acceptable but collocation is awkward; 'peace and quiet' is the correct fixed expression. No change of verb form needed. Suggestion: use natural collocations.

× Like I can easily, uh, see the views of sunset and sunrise on the daily basis.

✓ I can easily see views of the sunrise and sunset on a daily basis.

'On the daily basis' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'on a daily basis'. 'Views of sunset and sunrise' is better as 'views of the sunrise and sunset.' Remove filler 'like' and filler sounds for clarity. Suggestion: use 'on a daily basis' and place adverbs before main verb.

× Uh, but in the urban areas there is the rush of buildings.

✓ But in urban areas there is a crowding of buildings.

'The rush of buildings' is an odd collocation. Use 'crowding of buildings' or 'a lot of buildings' to convey congestion. Also remove unnecessary article 'the' before 'urban areas'. Suggestion: choose correct noun collocations to express density.

× I prefer to see the view, uh, everywhere.

✓ I prefer to see views everywhere.

Using the singular 'the view' is incorrect when referring generally; plural 'views' fits the meaning. Also 'the' is unnecessary. Suggestion: use plural for general, countable things.

× But to be honest, I mostly prefer to be in my home country because, umm, in my hometown there is a lot of plants which I can feel the fresh air quality as well as there is also a.

✓ But to be honest, I mostly prefer to be in my home country because in my hometown there are a lot of plants, I can enjoy the fresh air, and so on.

Multiple problems: 'there is a lot of plants' mixes singular verb with plural noun — correct is 'there are a lot of plants' (There be issue and subject-verb agreement). 'Which I can feel the fresh air quality' is ungrammatical; better: 'I can enjoy the fresh air.' The sentence trails off 'as well as there is also a.' Finish phrase or use 'and so on.' Suggestions: use 'there are' with plural nouns, use 'enjoy the fresh air' for natural phrasing, and complete the sentence.