视图— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, fix tense/word choice errors, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add one specific example of a memorable photo and a linking phrase to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos, especially while travelling. I save them on my phone so I can revisit special moments; for example, I often look at a sunrise photo I took in Bali to remind myself to be grateful. This habit helps me relive experiences and notice small details I might otherwise forget.

建议: Use present tense and a clear structure: state preference, give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words, and correct vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases and fillers. Mention concrete elements (e.g., mountains, rivers) and describe why they appeal to you.

示例: I prefer taking photos in rural areas because they offer natural scenery such as mountains, rivers and lakes, which are more peaceful than the city. For instance, I like photographing a quiet mountain lake at sunset because the calm water and soft light create a beautiful reflection.

建议: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing: state preference, give specific reasons and an example. Avoid repetition and unclear words like 'purposely'. Explain what you learn (e.g., traditions, architecture, food) and how you use it later.

示例: I prefer views in other countries because they are unfamiliar and interesting, and I can learn about different cultures and traditions. For example, photographing traditional markets abroad teaches me about local food and crafts, which I often share with friends when I return home.

× Absolutely yes. I love taking pictures, especially when I'm traveling. I save it on my phone to remind me of the things I experience and I if I want to feel the lighted or uh, remind me that I have to be grateful, I just browse pictures and videos on my phone.

✓ Absolutely. I love taking pictures, especially when I'm traveling. I save them on my phone to remind me of the things I experience, and if I want to feel the feelings or be reminded that I have to be grateful, I just browse the pictures and videos on my phone.

The original uses incorrect pronouns and singular/plural forms: 'it' refers to 'pictures' but should be 'them' (plural). The phrase 'feel the lighted' is unclear; replaced with 'feel the feelings' or 'be reminded' for clarity. Also added 'the' before 'pictures and videos' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their nouns and choose clear verbs for intended meaning.

× I preferred, uh, taking pictures of rural areas. It is because there's a values, uh, beautiful places like mountains, river trees, lakes that I could take both of our beaches with and the serenity and the calmness of the place keep.

✓ I prefer taking pictures of rural areas. It is because there are beautiful places like mountains, rivers, trees and lakes where I can take pictures, and the serenity and calmness of these places are appealing.

The student used 'preferred' (past) while answering a general preference question; present simple 'prefer' is correct. Many plural and agreement errors: 'there's a values' should be 'there are beautiful places' and 'river'→'rivers'. 'I could take both of our beaches with' is unclear; replaced with 'where I can take pictures'. 'the serenity and the calmness of the place keep' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'are appealing'. Suggestion: use present simple for general preferences and ensure subject-verb agreement and plural forms for lists.

× I preferred views that seen in other country. It is because it's not usual for me and then if I will go back I will have a lot of learnings like learning their cultural tradition and their their purposely that I could bring back to my.

✓ I prefer views seen in other countries. It is because they are unusual for me, and when I go back I will have many things to learn, such as their cultural traditions and practices that I could bring back to my country.

Used past tense 'preferred' instead of present 'prefer' for a general preference. 'views that seen in other country' is missing a verb form and plural: corrected to 'views seen in other countries'. Pronoun 'it's not usual for me' clarified to 'they are unusual for me' to match plural 'views'. 'if I will go back' should be 'when I go back' for natural future reference. 'a lot of learnings' is unnatural; replaced with 'many things to learn' and 'their their purposely' unclear, corrected to 'practices'. Ended with 'my country' to complete the noun. Suggestion: ensure verb forms are present for general statements, match pronouns with nouns, and use natural collocations like 'things to learn' and 'cultural traditions'.